Actually, I thought it was quite the piece. I couldn't imagine the scene as meaningful as it was without the Writer. Maybe because it's one stand-alone scene that it needs the Writer character to make things clear. But the moment Emily hugged the Writer... I assure you, you can't have the effects of that without a character such as the Writer in that little play.
To me, the Writer was a must-have. As he said, It's all invention. And the whole scene is about this little invention of his.
I've never seen such a role before in a play. Probably because I don't watch a lot of plays myself. But this is the first time I see such a character like the Writer, and I'm most astonished by the idea and the effects it had on me. I tried reading your work again while ignoring the Writer's lines and (maybe) give them to the second most-suited character. It just wasn't right. The freeze effect is also interesting, a moment of thought, a moment that shows the character's true thoughts in comparison with his/her actions and attitude (Darren for example.)
Wonderful, I really enjoyed those lines. I sure hope to read more.
Thank you so much for sharing this with us.