Each Day Like This

[Jack of Hearts]

Why?






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[Hawkman]

Well it reads ok (apart from that as)but personally I rather liked the excised line. I think the poem is a little diminished by its absence.

[ucello]

It's so profound and well written. Are you a published author?

[everyadventure]

Well, if you want a more thorough analysis... the "punks" threw me off as well. I was hoping there was some other colloquial meaning for the word, but it seems not. It doesn't go with the tone of the poem, and visualizing "punks" in the "breeze" is a strange image indeed.

I liked the ice, myself, I didn't see a problem with it and it was an apt metaphor (or perhaps simile, I can't remember exactly what you wrote). In any case, I like the poem quite a bit.

[hallaig]

All: Think the ice hole image appears in another poem by me, that's why I took a spite at it. Will think about the punks, since you're all so iffy with it. Thanks very much for your advice, folks.

Ucello: Aye, here and there