In Search For More

[Twota]

I walked through deserts
looking for godly wisdom,
but all I found was sand,
I swam across all seas
in search for cosmic knowledge,
but I could never quench my thirst,
So I visited a famous wise scientist
to ask him about his sources,
He smiled and simply said:
''I can feel the godly wisdom
in a grain of sand,
and I can touch cosmic knowledge
in a drop of water'',
wise and subtle were his words
but not in anyway- enough.

[Buh4Bee]

Reminds me in a strange way of the Alchemist by Paolo Coelho. I think it is just the connection of the desert and searching in it for wisdom.

[Twota]

lol, that's one of my favourite books hahaa.

[osho]

I walked through deserts
looking for godly wisdom,
but all I found was sand,
I swam across all seas
in search for cosmic knowledge,
but I could never quench my thirst,
So I visited a famous wise scientist
to ask him about his sources,
He smiled and simply said:
''I can feel the godly wisdom
in a grain of sand,
and I can touch cosmic knowledge
in a drop of water'',
wise and subtle were his words
but not in anyway- enough.

I find your poem deeply moving and this mirrors the exact feeling I have always about everything. Very philosophical and inspiring.

[Buh4Bee]

I can see you quote him. I have to read The Witch of Portobello for my book club. It's a bit different taking many different narrative voices, but written with the same kind of lesson telling/ wisdom that I guess is his style. Unfortunately my e-reader has been broken by my child so I have to replace it.

[Twota]

osho, thanks alot, that's how I feel too.

jersea, well I didn't really 'quote' him but I am surely touched by what I 've read , I will finish The Zahir today and then read Eleven Minutes, I love his style.

[Delta40]

It has that fable feel to it.

[Buh4Bee]

At the bottom of your page, not the poem.

[Twota]

Delta, I hope that makes it any good in your opinion.

jersea, LOL, I almost forgot I quoted him here. XD forgive my stupidity.

[hillwalker]

Definitely a fable, so obviously based on some generalised truth rather than your own personal experience (which is where I felt a little cheated - you're not giving us any insight into your own belief, just recycling someone else's rather cliche-ed observation that there's more to life than what appears on the surface).

Perhaps you need to allow other people's ideas to ferment in your own mind then come up with something a little more grounded in your own life. That way the poem would read more sincerely than this.

H

[Twota]

hmmm, yes, it aint a personal experience and a cliche for sure xD but I felt like it, I don't know why, but I will try to allow other people's ideas to ferment in my brain, it sounds cool.

Thanks hill.