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    Feeling

    The wheeling
    and dealing
    has left them reeling
    as they run squealing,
    while from above falls on them
    the ceiling.
    But they can't stop peeling
    the skin before
    it's done healing,
    killing all feeling.

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    Ugh - rhymed to death.

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    Before sunlight can shine through a window, the blinds must be raised - American Proverb

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    It was an experiment in rhyme, really.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Mutatis-Mutandi View Post
    It was an experiment in rhyme, really.
    To torture your readers? Well, consider it a success.

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    Is there any other /i:/ ling can be put here?

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    I don't really get why you have to be so mean about it, hillwalker. And if 34 words can be tortuous, I wield a great power.

    And it's all I could think of, yuka. If I would have thought of more, they would've gone in.
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