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    Within Four Walls

    Condemnation is a sculpture, statue,
    build upon a pediment on the far side of my room -
    a big, electrifying eye scrutinizing my motion,
    ringing the siren every time I try to breathe.
    Guilt pours tears of desolation and self-deprecation
    from a spring built-in just above my bed,
    and when I raise my stare, I can only see
    the pointing finger piercing the stuffy air of the room.
    Distrust is a metronome counting my dreams fallen,
    burying them into a silent graveyard below my window -
    distrust is a face that turns and masks itself as a smile,
    while its eyes betray the only spirit behind -
    loss of confidence, at all.
    Despair hangs by the door, clad in my ragged and tattered ambitions,
    waving with a hand encapsulated by the velvet glove
    of smothered desires, of laughter that hides inner desolation -
    the wind banging the open windows of the empty room -
    and this spirit of despair - a knight of rotting, rusty armour,
    wakes me up, past midnight, with a letter from the tax administration
    urging me to pay my dues, with interest accrued,
    with what is left in the sanctuary under my bed -
    this already hollow heart and soul of mine.
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    "Existence - what does it matter? I exist on the best terms I can.
    The past is now part of my future, the present is well out of hand."

    Ian Curtis (1956-1980, Joy Division) - "Heart and Soul" (Closer, 1980)

    "My body is a cage,
    But my mind holds the key."

    Arcade Fire - "My Body is a Cage" (Neon Bible, 2007)

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    So the taxes need to be paid. I guess that's a good reason for despair, depending on how much is involved that is. I usually get a sense of guilt when I'm caught speeding. It doesn't last long however.

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    Quote Originally Posted by YesNo View Post
    So the taxes need to be paid. I guess that's a good reason for despair, depending on how much is involved that is. I usually get a sense of guilt when I'm caught speeding. It doesn't last long however.
    To be honest, the piece has nothing to do with taxes, here it is a metaphore, and despair is not a consequence of taxes.
    I'd say this is a piece about making internal feelings external by transfering them to items around.
    "Existence - what does it matter? I exist on the best terms I can.
    The past is now part of my future, the present is well out of hand."

    Ian Curtis (1956-1980, Joy Division) - "Heart and Soul" (Closer, 1980)

    "My body is a cage,
    But my mind holds the key."

    Arcade Fire - "My Body is a Cage" (Neon Bible, 2007)

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