Hi, I could really use some help with this short story. It is only 240 words and I don't want to add to it in the least. I would just like a really honest opinion from someone unbiased any help would be immensely appreciated. Thanks in advance.
This was the end. There was no more that could be done. All of the protectors had fallen and Silas was the only one left to face the terrific beast. Sweat streamed from his brow and blood dripped from gaping wounds like tears down a filthy face.
In the darkness, it howled.
Luminous yellow eyes appeared everywhere he looked. It was fast. Silas stumbled backwards and reached for the blade concealed in the fold of material that used to be his pocket. Before he even removed the blade another gash marred his face. Silas’ throat burned as he screamed in agony. It was vicious. He pictured the beast as best he could but how could you fight what you couldn’t see?
Midnight fur covered a head so inhuman and horrifying it could not be described and teeth more severe than the sharpest blade hung in jagged rows. This was the thing that had murdered more people than disease. It had lived for countless millennia. The beast moved so fast it became invisible to the human eye. It was the perfect predator simply because once it took a hold of you that was it. Nothing could stop pure instinct. As proof, mangled bodies lay around him, broken beyond repair.
As his breathing grew more ragged Silas cursed.