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Last edited by Jerrybaldy; 05-07-2011 at 06:39 AM.
For those who believe,
no explanation is necessary.
For those who do not,
none will suffice.
Writing from a 'errr you got girl germs' perspective I would have to say 'ick!'
Before sunlight can shine through a window, the blinds must be raised - American Proverb
I wish I knew what any of that meant answerphone x
For those who believe,
no explanation is necessary.
For those who do not,
none will suffice.
Ok. It seems to me that little boys often don't like girls or think about them. When I was little I was told I had 'girl germs' by boys. However, there is a crossing over into manhood where that is all they want to catch....
your poem seems to highlight the two.
Sock puppet says: Delta40 is also a muffler
Before sunlight can shine through a window, the blinds must be raised - American Proverb
You have issues Delta, luckily for us and maybe for you your issues lead to poetry x
For those who believe,
no explanation is necessary.
For those who do not,
none will suffice.
Sock Puppet says: Jerrybaldy is not a sock puppet of Princemyshkin
Before sunlight can shine through a window, the blinds must be raised - American Proverb
I appreciate the poem, especially the first two lines, which hearken back to my childhood days when my brother would always tell me my parents were having sex, knowing I didn't want a younger sibling.
This poem succeeds at capturing a childhood voice, the mystery of love and adulthood, and anticipations of adulthood, all very well. Your ending wasn't as strong as the beginning, although the concluding two lines reminded me of Theodore Roethke's "My Papa's Waltz" in affection. Nice work, nonetheless.
Regards,
IceM
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