I'm sorry for posting so little, but I wanted feedback right away after I came up with this for my English class..
Searching for
Eternity for the one
Creation that
Remains forever concealed.
Each never to see
The light of day.
What do you think?
I'm sorry for posting so little, but I wanted feedback right away after I came up with this for my English class..
Searching for
Eternity for the one
Creation that
Remains forever concealed.
Each never to see
The light of day.
What do you think?
Books completed in 2011:
- Shadow of the Hegemon - Orson Scott Card
- The Inferno - Dante Alighieri
- The Iliad - Homer
"Homer was on the rowing team at his high school." ~My grandfather
I think it's a clever secret.
I think the first two lines are a bit syntactically awkward, but I rather like the rest of the piece.
"As far as we can discern, the sole purpose of human existence is to kindle a light of meaning in the darkness of mere being." --Carl Gustav Jung
"To absent friends, lost loves, old gods, and the season of mists; and may each and every one of us always give the devil his due." --Neil Gaiman; The Sandman Vol. 4: Season of Mists
"I'm on my way, from misery to happiness today. Uh-huh, uh-huh, uh-huh, uh-huh" --The Proclaimers
I do agree. Thank you both.
Books completed in 2011:
- Shadow of the Hegemon - Orson Scott Card
- The Inferno - Dante Alighieri
- The Iliad - Homer
"Homer was on the rowing team at his high school." ~My grandfather
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