I'm glad to see that you've decided to put all your work in one thread. That way you can chart your own progress. Additionally, as time goes by and you wish to look up one of your previous works, it's a lot easier to find it in a central location rather than scattered all across the Personal Poetry forum. (Don't worry about getting "hits" --every time you post something, even in an "pre-existing" thread, it automatically gets "bumped" to the top of the New Posts forum.)
The other good move you're making is reading as many modern and contemporary poems as you can. Langston Hughes is a good start; you can also learn much from Auden, Eliot, Frost, and Yeats. At this point you should spend more time reading rather than writing (at first.) The more you read, the more craft you'll begin to develop, almost by osmosis.
Even if you prefer writing free verse, it won't hurt and definitely would help to read copious amounts of metered verse. You could also try to write a few metered lines yourself. After a while, you'll get a sense of rhythm and also an awareness of what a "poetic line" is.
Now, about your offerings(so far.) I've read them and the main thing that jumped out at me is that your verses are heavy with abstractions and light on specific images. You'll also want to avoid, if you can, banalities and clichés.
It took me a long time, but just for you I managed to unearth this article by Walt McDonald:
http://wwwstage.valpo.edu/english/vp...naldessay.html
Please read it, at least the first section which deals with
abstractions. The article mentions how Pound abhorred
abstractions; William Carlos Williams as well insisted that there are "no ideas except in things."
Good luck with your reading and writing.