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    It wasn't me Jerrybaldy's Avatar
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    Nurture

    Baby with the piercings
    Baby with the Nike
    Mummy with the big mouth
    Baby with the Gucci.
    Daddy with the knuckles
    Baby with the Big Mac
    Daddy with the ketchup
    Mummy with the ice crack.
    Daddy with the grease spots
    Mummy with the large fries
    Daddy with the white lines
    Baby with the black eyes.
    Last edited by Jerrybaldy; 03-30-2011 at 07:43 PM.

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    Freed by your indulgence deryk's Avatar
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    This is hard to critique, it's so pointy. Amusingly, I had considered writing a poem about pierced babies, it's a good first line. I especially like the mixture of "high" and "low" products. It reminds me of what Andy Warhol once said about everyone enjoying a coca-cola the same regardless of their income bracket.
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    This was, like, brilliant until the last line - which was like a fist full of brass knuckles!!!

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    Pretty gruesome, oh bald one!

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