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    Some recent poetry:

    I dream of the sleep a man deserves
    When he’s worked hard, and the echoes of his work
    Are still reverberating in his heart, and the pleasure of a job well done
    Will salt his sleep like caramel in hot chocolate.
    Before bed, a cup with his son.
    Later, a cup with his wife, shared over a smile.
    And that honey-amber look in her eyes that pools only for him.
    And a realization: that life is good.
    Last edited by andave_ya; 03-22-2011 at 08:56 AM.
    "The time has come," the Walrus said,
    "To talk of many things:
    Of shoes--and ships--and sealing-wax--
    Of cabbages--and kings--
    And why the sea is boiling hot--
    And whether pigs have wings."

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    Those first three lines are very well done. The last three are a bit on the sappy side for me "Salt" was an intriguing word choice.

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