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    The City Speaks

    Tonight this city speaks
    Even now as the night peaks

    As if to mock the sight of day
    The city’s lights are on display

    Poisonous fumes fill the air
    It’s becoming quite hard to bear

    The constant stumbling of a drunk
    Wanting only to be in his bunk

    Underneath the saloon’s drape
    Contemplating tonight’s escape

    He leaves the safety of his seat
    But rebellious, are his feet

    For, the street’s corner is where he lies
    Overcome by the city’s cries

    Fleeing from this unbearable sound
    He crawls along the dirty ground

    Slowly reaching the building wall
    Trying so hard not to fall

    But atlas! The lights are spinning
    The alcohol will soon be winning

    Grasping his knees
    He succumbs to disease

    Eyes, watering up
    Like an infant, he throws up

    Not even God would contest
    That this city gives no rest

    Not to the weak nor the weary
    Most, find this place quite eerie

    Helped to his feet by stubbornness alone
    The man begins trudging without even a moan

    Destitute, broken, and constantly abusing
    The city doesn’t mind; it finds it amusing

    A man Helplessly wavering,
    For this city, the moments worth savoring

    He’s drunk and fumbling, it’s the middle of night
    Without any will left, he concludes the fight

    Unwilling, unable, to take anymore
    His body collapses upon the pavement floor

    He’s attempting fetal position
    Crying and pleading, as if in submission

    The man is closing his eyes
    Thus confirming his own demise

    The city’s response is loud and coarse
    For the billboard above, reads “no remorse”

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    I love the pace, and the urgency, and the way the poem reads. But I can't make my mind up about the rhyme scheme. In a way it feels like it adds to the desperation of the reading, but it also feels rather forced. You may want to consider toning it back a bit, and I think it will feel just as urgent, without feeling rushed or forced. The last line made me laugh. Thanks for sharing.

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