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    The Crossing Over

    Bernie spluttered his exhaust
    and slowed to a white knuckle crawl
    where little green men
    absconded with the imagination
    of the impatient driver.

    Spit and **** splattered
    across his windscreen
    while children floated by
    encompassed in clouds
    of laughter and cheek.

    Amber ignited dye
    in his blue fog eyes
    to mask his prehistoric thinking
    caught in the juncture of
    this one instant.

    Bernie wished just once
    he could jump the queue,
    zoom ahead,
    never look back.

    He pondered the philosophy blaring
    between the static of
    his crackling radio
    where it is better to plough
    through ones troubles,
    even if a shower of shattered glass
    is the only way out.

    Before he had time to evolve,
    the red flashing man materialised
    like a throbbing migraine and
    Bernie delivered the catalyst like a baby.
    Blossoms of future hope
    randomly catapulted out of
    the flickering intersection
    of mortality.

    Bernie careened propulsively
    and hit the red man, who
    in the slow motion of action,
    lifted Bernie out
    with a dotted lit hand
    as if he was the angel of traffic.

    An incandescent pedestrian,
    Bernie walked across the junction
    toward the beckoning red man at the
    end of his own tunnel.
    The little green man re-appeared
    to click the endless passage
    of time in micro seconds.

    Bernie looked back at the
    scintillating moment
    and raged at the realisation that
    no matter how sharply he veered,
    some truths could never be avoided.
    Last edited by Delta40; 02-27-2011 at 09:01 AM.
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    Oh, I've been there many a time myself have faced too many of these odious, officious littl ered ___tards!

    Well done, though I think there's some pronoun ambiguity in

    In the slow motion of action,
    he lifted Bernie out

    where "he" might for a moment appear to refer to Bernie himself. Could it be:

    who, in the slow motion of action,
    lifted Bernie out

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    thanks for the tip. edited.
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    Walk dont walk. I have never before read careened. You become ever more descriptive. Throughout.
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