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    Thank you, nature, full of blossom,
    you make me happy in my bosom.
    I find you so beautiful and mirth,
    I find you fit for my spiritual rebirth.

    Someone’s given you a powerful behest
    to always give rise to my breast,
    and to console and to heat like fire,
    emulating with my poems of desire.

    Odours of your air sway,
    in my rhymes I can portray.
    A peaceful poem for your graceful eyes
    I make and give you, for no praise.

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    Joyful. You may get some critique for the rhyme but it was no less than joyful .
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    Quote Originally Posted by free View Post
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    A peaceful poem for your graceful eyes
    I make and give you, for no praise.
    It is nice that you offer the poem as a gift to nature and expect no praise in return.

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    lol. I was distracted by bosom/breast and also the rhyming which forces the shape of the poem rather than letting it flow freely. It has a sun shiny feel though
    Before sunlight can shine through a window, the blinds must be raised - American Proverb

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    Quote Originally Posted by Jerrybaldy View Post
    Joyful. You may get some critique for the rhyme but it was no less than joyful .
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    Thanks, JB. Exactly what I felt when writing the poem.
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    Love your poem.

    I might be inclined to suggest an adjective before "air sway": fresh/pungent/fragrant/etc. to give a little more weight to L9.

    Yes, truly a joy to read.

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    Thank you, tailor. You are right.

    Odours of your pleasant air sway

    sounds better.
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    Thank you all for your comments.
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    I go out and walk
    Every step is a joy with you
    Every view is a delight
    With you

    Oh, how I would love
    To have my darling walking with me
    To share this beauty with the loved man

    The emotion of endless happiness
    That nature wakes in me
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    Even when one is alone that seems to be the best way to walk where every step is a joy and a delight. Nice poem.

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    Quote Originally Posted by YesNo View Post
    Even when one is alone that seems to be the best way to walk where every step is a joy and a delight. Nice poem.
    Thanks.
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    A fenced field
    Deers graze quietly under the trees
    Of oaks sealed
    To guard and whisper with breeze

    Those mighty trunks
    Draw their powers
    From the ground's tanks
    Covered with grass and flowers
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    I liked the way you combined the poem with a photography and then centered it. It gives it an attractive visual layout. I was puzzled by the word "sealed", but I suspect they were guarding and whispering something. Last summer I was hiking in northern Illinois and noticed for the first time the open oak woodland ecology preserved in some parks.

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    Quote Originally Posted by YesNo View Post
    I liked the way you combined the poem with a photography and then centered it. It gives it an attractive visual layout. I was puzzled by the word "sealed", but I suspect they were guarding and whispering something. Last summer I was hiking in northern Illinois and noticed for the first time the open oak woodland ecology preserved in some parks.
    Thanks, YesNo. I am not sure if my intention to express a kind of agreement to do something by 'sealed'. Like a sealed document. It is not easy to feel the exact impression of a foreign language.
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    Free, thank you so much for posting these. They are quite lovely, and I really think every thing we can do in today's day and age to inspire people to appreciate and love nature's beauty, is one of the greatest and most important things we can do, as saving the ecology is by far and away the most important task we have in this modern-day, so inspiring appreciation for beauty seems to be one of the most effective ways to help. I look forward to seeing more!

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