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    Registered User myawho's Avatar
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    What love does.

    I see you,
    Your walking across the campus.
    You ask me do
    I like you like you want us?
    "I'll tell you soon."
    Was my response to your curiousness. My
    Confidence hangs low,
    So I'll study on romances.
    I'm not sure that I do
    like you,
    I only met you
    yesterday...

    The stones and grass,
    come together like
    an arm and cast.
    But you and me
    go together like
    a tumor attached
    to me.

    My impulse is
    To tell you that I don't want you, but
    The impulses
    Collapse when you approach.
    "Your answer is?":
    The words that gave me horror.
    Intentions fails,
    "I like you." was the answer.
    What happened to me,
    why did I give into this?
    I drew my profile picture!

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    Haribol Acharya blazeofglory's Avatar
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    [QUOTE

    The stones and grass,
    come together like
    an arm and cast.
    But you and me
    go together like
    a tumor attached
    to me.

    [/QUOTE]

    I like these lines and they are highly moving. I generally do not get moved by poetry and yet this beauty of this one is really incomparable.

    This is exactly what love does.

    We are deluded that live can be a curative medicine but it hardly is and we get lost in a world of love and we love delusion for truth is not sweet pill in life

    “Those who seek to satisfy the mind of man by hampering it with ceremonies and music and affecting charity and devotion have lost their original nature””

    “If water derives lucidity from stillness, how much more the faculties of the mind! The mind of the sage, being in repose, becomes the mirror of the universe, the speculum of all creation.

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    It wasn't me Jerrybaldy's Avatar
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    I agree with Blaze regards the middle stanza.

    I enjoyed the reality and the ability to connect with your writing. Like a comedian you put us in a place where we can empaphise and see ourselves through your experience.

    I enjoyed it and look forward to your future postings.
    cheers
    Jerry

    For those who believe,
    no explanation is necessary.
    For those who do not,
    none will suffice.

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