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    The Ravin

    The Ravin


    A crown of thorns I wear for all to see
    The flower of youth spent one with the breeze
    'T Was content in pastoral reflection

    When one day made ravin, a knife to throat
    Bringing an unwont freedom in terror

    In innocence tossed into the cauldron
    Esteemed, suffering in silence, to be
    Ushered before my tormentor to face
    As surreal a nightmare tableau set

    Layer by layer off my garments stripped
    As layer by layer my flesh ravaged
    Savaged till last choke mete and cast aside

    Am I not tortured enough in your eyes ?
    Do you yet seek one more indignation ?

    No ! Mine heart ! Mine heart you seek to devour !
    Succumbing to your ravening - no more

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    I'm not at all sure how to read/interpret

    When one day made ravin

    and assume that the protagonist is the crucified Christ? An anguished poem indeed!

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    Thank you for the read PrinceMyshkin.

    The context of "The Ravin" being in this case something being seized as prey, as opposed to 'raven' which in generally usage is different in meaning. Also, "The Raven" as a title was already coined by another POEt.

    I tried to get into the Halloween spirit using an anthropomorphic artichoke (as opposed to an anthropophagic artichoke [which which might have been more interesting]) as the protagonist; which makes some of my word play a bit more illuminating.

    Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
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    who am I but a stitch in time
    what if I were to bare my soul
    would you see me origami

    7-8-2015

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