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    Twilight

    We spoke of dusks and dawns
    One afternoon late summer
    Over cups of tea getting cold
    As words poured out...
    And tears got mingled with
    Shadows of joy
    We held hands and cruised down
    The memory lane and a soft hush
    Fell over time
    We could not speak anymore… as words
    Got jumbled like a ball of wool
    Gets tangled while knitting
    And a stone stuck in our throats
    Where the tears choked
    And Heart pulsated with a rhythm
    Hitherto unknown
    It’s been a long time that our paths
    Had intersected
    We had crossed each other by
    With just a nod, a glint of a shy smile
    In our eyes and a blush of a pink rose
    In our cheeks
    Now ages after…
    The leaves have fallen off the trees
    Leaving rugged branches like scraggy arms
    Held aloft towards the sky
    in a mournful prayer
    We have again met but now
    Withered by pain, wrinkled with grief
    And a frown which tells stories of
    Deprivation and defiance
    Of lost dreams
    We just sit across staring vacantly
    At the horizon
    A vapour of a sigh hangs in between
    A thread which needles our thoughts
    Lonely, listless, lame...
    Just scraping our calm a wee bit
    Would silence have prevailed?
    Like this?
    Had we met ages ago…?
    Geetashree Chatterjee

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    A lovely poem about old acquaintances meeting up after a long time and suddenly able to converse more easily than in the past - now that the awkwardness of youth has been tempered by age and experience.

    I particularly liked the use of a ball of wool and a needle and thread as metaphors for memories and words.

    There are one or two instances where you repeat unnecessarily - saying the same thing in more than one way as if to stress a point. But overall a fine poem.

    H

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    Very Touching. This poem arouses me to plan for a school re-union. Thank you Geetaji.

    Regards

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