"Hawk, thanks so much for your kind comment and feedback. The itals tell a story within story, it's also the heart of the poem and in a way it's independent of the events of 9/11. it's a standalone."
Yes, I understand that, Haunted, and really that's kind of my point. It is a separate poem which disrupts the flow of the main body of the work. As a separate poem it is very good in its own right, but personally, I don't think they work together. Still, it's your poem
Thanks for letting us see it.
Best, H