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    Today, for the first time.......

    Today for the first time.....


    Today, I saw your face for the first time.
    Oh, I'd seen you from afar,
    I knew vaguely,
    As if in a mist.
    But today... today
    My world lit up.
    I had expected you to be pretty,
    But I had never expected what I saw.
    Beauty.
    Pure, sheer, heart-stopping Beauty.
    The shape - I cannot describe it.
    I don't know the words.
    There must be some, but
    I don't know them.
    Your hair, radiant, shining,
    Black.
    Your skin, flawless,
    Like the finest marble,
    Yet marble is cold,
    Your face not.
    I want to touch, caress.
    Your mouth. Cupid would be proud.
    I want to kiss.
    Yearn.
    Your eyes.
    My special one, your eyes.
    They will ever haunt me,
    The depth, they way they shine,
    The honey warmth.
    Today, I saw your face for the first time.
    My heart skipped a beat,
    And I fell.
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    you are a romantic and you I love they way you pen these verses Daydd.
    Before sunlight can shine through a window, the blinds must be raised - American Proverb

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    Thanks Delta, appreciate the comment. It always helps when it's a real experience, which this was, and recent, which it also was. Special people help!!
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    Dear Dafydd, this one blows me away... Speechless sir, just beautiful.

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    shucks

    Is this about my posting my pic yesterday Daffy ????
    seriously mate is an honest slice of love. writing of not being able to find the words particularly.
    'Matron. He is doing the good serious poetry again and the seriously good poetry. Shall I pull his moustache?'

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    Thanks, Jerry, Mary, Delta. It's peeps like you that make it that much easier.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Jerrybaldy View Post
    Is this about my posting my pic yesterday Daffy ????
    seriously mate is an honest slice of love. writing of not being able to find the words particularly.
    'Matron. He is doing the good serious poetry again and the seriously good poetry. Shall I pull his moustache?'
    Jerry... Is there something you are not telling us?...

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    Daf, it's disarming! ageless love, silk beautiful, but does it need to lead to - as the final lines suggest - a heart attack??? (this ambiguous "falling" - though I know you meant: "... in love" - is my only reservation for this otherwise touching first-sight-love poem!)

    You're such an openly emotional dear creature! Thank you.

    Bar

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    Quote Originally Posted by Bar22do View Post
    Daf, it's disarming! ageless love, silk beautiful, but does it need to lead to - as the final lines suggest - a heart attack??? (this ambiguous "falling" - though I know you meant: "... in love" - is my only reservation for this otherwise touching first-sight-love poem!)

    You're such an openly emotional dear creature! Thank you.

    Bar
    Well, Bar, to be honest, when this happened , I very nearly DID have a heart-attack, but I thought it best to just leave it as "falling". That left various options such as falling for her, falling in love, falling in to those beautiful eyes, any of those, so I left it open. Thanks for the suggestion, though, I always appreciate it. I just...well....fell! Haven't stopped, yet.....
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    Picks her dear friend up...

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    Quote Originally Posted by dafydd manton View Post
    Well, Bar, to be honest, when this happened , I very nearly DID have a heart-attack, but I thought it best to just leave it as "falling". That left various options such as falling for her, falling in love, falling in to those beautiful eyes, any of those, so I left it open. Thanks for the suggestion, though, I always appreciate it. I just...well....fell! Haven't stopped, yet.....
    "Fall" on its own almost always reminds me of the fall of man (i.e., Adam and Eve's fall from the grace because of the original sin).
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    Quote Originally Posted by Jerrybaldy View Post
    Is this about my posting my pic yesterday Daffy ????
    seriously mate is an honest slice of love. writing of not being able to find the words particularly.
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    lmao! I mean, I really am trying to take Dafydd's more tender verses seriously and then you come out with this!
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    Oh dear - Original Sin. Not quite so far advanced, I hope! No, I saw someone today, and I was astounded at her incredible, classical beauty. Takes 55 years.............!
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    and just think, you're a step closer to meeting another beauty too! isn't life exciting
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    'Matron, he is being enigmatic and esoteric again'

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