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    The Swan's Solitude

    The Swan’s Solitude

    There is a swan dying
    in a sewer,
    and I am the sewer.
    In my dreams, I am a gutter.
    A swan is dying, hidden
    and underground
    In a gutter.
    The sewer is overflowing
    and a swan is dying.
    In a sewer a swan
    is dying,
    in my dreams
    in a gutter,
    it dies with me.
    I have no blood in these veins
    but words that run as coarse
    and dark as when they first
    encounter arteries of secrets
    that burst onto this page.

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    I like it! Such soul-shredding angst.
    "The important thing is not to stop questioning. Curiosity has its' own reason for existing." ~ Albert Einstein
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    I love the strength your words seem to possess here. Terrible but powerful!
    I sang of leaves, of leaves of gold, and leaves of gold there grew.

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    Mesmerizing! Beautiful and mesmerizing.

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    I love the rhythm of this tragedy
    Before sunlight can shine through a window, the blinds must be raised - American Proverb

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    the juxtaposition of swan and sewer is fresh and provocative.

    "But do you really, seriously, Major Scobie," Dr. Sykes asked, "believe in hell?"
    "Oh, yes, I do."
    "In flames and torment?"
    "Perhaps not quite that. They tell us it may be a permanent sense of loss."
    "That sort of hell wouldn't worry me," Fellowes said.
    "Perhaps you've never lost anything of importance," Scobie said.

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    Did you symbolise swan for spirit/soul?Very well done.

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