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    A man in the door

    a man
    is in the door frame, a man
    now large in the doorway,
    larger in the frame now
    leaning into the frame

    a man
    at a naked angle
    filament of light encircles
    muscle in golden halo fire,

    a man,
    statue of a man, that damn
    chisel man, chiselled by a
    thousand hands, chiselled
    by a thousand years

    murderous, cruel,
    violent hands of pig
    dog man

    putrid smell,
    intellect and hanging lungs
    in leaden heads that make
    the dead swell, fatten,
    that make horse faces
    grunting pig noises

    a man
    grinding sounds of a stream
    furrowing an error in

    coming
    down the
    stairs now,
    lady fingers
    tracing banister
    where death swells
    fattens and where the
    sky yields another yellow

    sun,
    lady fingers open up the window,
    closes eyes,
    closes mind

    against the wind, the sky, the eyes unfold -
    a world grasps - wind, rope, iron, a white sky -
    a grey and angry sky.
    a different angle
    on the West.

    from the train, pylons slice with black lines,
    dispensing fingers of grey clouds, grey land,
    brings forth an opal grey, dank, yellowing,

    brings forth a yellow centre full of busses
    cars workers shoppers, desperate poor
    counters, guzzlers, life haters,
    lifeless wife beaters but
    No angle on the West.

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    wow. that room is permeated with man descriptions that would make me open the window too. his size is excellently shown against the doorframe
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    I could recognize the power of a fertile, active imagination but couldn't grasp the context within which to understand this.

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    The whole thing seems to ooze fear, from beginning to end, right down to the end, which seemed to me to be a comment on Western society? A discomfiting but excellent read.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Asphara View Post
    a man
    is in the door frame, a man
    now large in the doorway,
    larger in the frame now
    leaning into the frame

    a man
    at a naked angle
    filament of light encircles
    muscle in golden halo fire,

    a man,
    statue of a man, that damn
    ....
    ....
    "Believe me, man!"
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