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    I Don't Want Your Lies

    A poem based on a dream I had

    I Don't Want Your Lies

    I don't want your petty lies
    even if they are intended
    as drops of honey
    falling from nightmare skies.

    I rather you keep silent
    then speak your bittersweet nothings
    that derive from an empty
    hollow space.

    Don't give me your reassurances
    as you stare at me with
    cold dead eyes that reflect
    no hint of warmth.

    I know perfectly well the truth
    so don't give me false caresses
    that graze my flesh
    like razor edged shark's skin.

    Deep into that darkness peering, long I stood there, wondering, fearing, doubting, dreaming dreams no mortal ever dared to dream before. ~ Edgar Allan Poe

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    Oh, I like this DM.
    Great finish...peace...
    "Remember, we are all in this alone." - Lilly Tomlin

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    Thank you!

    Deep into that darkness peering, long I stood there, wondering, fearing, doubting, dreaming dreams no mortal ever dared to dream before. ~ Edgar Allan Poe

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    Although one can't escape the vehement power of this, it does backfire a little or raise a bit of Methinks the lady/man doth protest too much - i.e., we have to take the speaker's word for it that the person addressed does lie, and a wee bit of smart-a** in me is prompted to respond to the title: "Whose lies, then, do you want?"

    But, to reiterate, the pain in this is overwhelming.

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    I like this "razor edged shark's skin. ". Not to geek out too much--but feeling dermal denitcles was one of the coolest sensations I've ever felt with my hands.
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    'A poem based on a dream I had' establishes such an astonishing authority!!

    What I enjoy the most (but would not work without the previous stanza)

    I rather you keep silent
    then speak your bittersweet nothings
    that derive from an empty
    hollow space.


    Love it!!! Thanks for sharing!

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    Thank you!

    Deep into that darkness peering, long I stood there, wondering, fearing, doubting, dreaming dreams no mortal ever dared to dream before. ~ Edgar Allan Poe

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    DM, it sounds as if your dream was daringly telling aloud what the N could not tell in the real time... a very healing process then, if this was the case!
    With TheEarthIsRound, I too like S2 the best, though all of your poem has a unity that strengthens its intense protest. Thank you - be well! Bar

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    Thank you, though truth be told this poem really does not come from any personal experience I have had.

    Deep into that darkness peering, long I stood there, wondering, fearing, doubting, dreaming dreams no mortal ever dared to dream before. ~ Edgar Allan Poe

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    what an interesting dream, then... worthwhile exploring...

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    Yes, though I do not recall the details it was quite strange, but it very well might have been influenced by poetry of others I have been reading.

    Deep into that darkness peering, long I stood there, wondering, fearing, doubting, dreaming dreams no mortal ever dared to dream before. ~ Edgar Allan Poe

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    great work, DM! I loved this one!

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    Thank you!

    Deep into that darkness peering, long I stood there, wondering, fearing, doubting, dreaming dreams no mortal ever dared to dream before. ~ Edgar Allan Poe

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    another great one Thanks for sharing

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    It's weird but it happened to me, you speak what I felt once. It's about someone I met in my past: ...."cold dead eyes that reflect
    no hint of warmth"
    "Where love is there God is also".
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