aww Jerry, thanks so much for your vote of confidence!!! I take feedback seriously and I value every comment. Yours just made my day! Please feel free to critique my future postings, even if it's a criticism it'll still help me. Thanks again
aww Jerry, thanks so much for your vote of confidence!!! I take feedback seriously and I value every comment. Yours just made my day! Please feel free to critique my future postings, even if it's a criticism it'll still help me. Thanks again
"But do you really, seriously, Major Scobie," Dr. Sykes asked, "believe in hell?"
"In flames and torment?""Oh, yes, I do."
"That sort of hell wouldn't worry me," Fellowes said."Perhaps not quite that. They tell us it may be a permanent sense of loss."
"Perhaps you've never lost anything of importance," Scobie said.
Originally Posted by Haunted
If I know you are
the best nightmare,
I'd rather dream of Angel.
If you must know ...
your worst lamb
I am.
the Angel in your dream
is not an angel...
but you
already know that
don't you
"But do you really, seriously, Major Scobie," Dr. Sykes asked, "believe in hell?"
"In flames and torment?""Oh, yes, I do."
"That sort of hell wouldn't worry me," Fellowes said."Perhaps not quite that. They tell us it may be a permanent sense of loss."
"Perhaps you've never lost anything of importance," Scobie said.
That makes the two of us:
As the angel in my dream
Is not an angel
So the world is not the world
That I see in the sun!
so where's
the best place
to view the eclipse
of the sun
your world
or mine?
"But do you really, seriously, Major Scobie," Dr. Sykes asked, "believe in hell?"
"In flames and torment?""Oh, yes, I do."
"That sort of hell wouldn't worry me," Fellowes said."Perhaps not quite that. They tell us it may be a permanent sense of loss."
"Perhaps you've never lost anything of importance," Scobie said.
Love Story
let’s do something
different today
let’s take a trip
to September of 1948
let’s dress up
as a Hollywood couple
let’s do a stunt
and scale the steepest cliff
let’s pose for the camera
and kiss like there’s no tomorrow
let’s write our own script
of seduction, love, lust and betrayal
let’s rehearse our lines
for the riveting, tear jerking last scene
let’s give me your best acting
pretend you love me more than you love her
let’s make a pact
that you will not hold me back on my way down
"But do you really, seriously, Major Scobie," Dr. Sykes asked, "believe in hell?"
"In flames and torment?""Oh, yes, I do."
"That sort of hell wouldn't worry me," Fellowes said."Perhaps not quite that. They tell us it may be a permanent sense of loss."
"Perhaps you've never lost anything of importance," Scobie said.
OMG Haunted. I love this one... I so love it. It is your best so far... Mwah my love.
(Let's make a pact - xo)
thanks so much Mary! mmmwahhh dear!!!
"But do you really, seriously, Major Scobie," Dr. Sykes asked, "believe in hell?"
"In flames and torment?""Oh, yes, I do."
"That sort of hell wouldn't worry me," Fellowes said."Perhaps not quite that. They tell us it may be a permanent sense of loss."
"Perhaps you've never lost anything of importance," Scobie said.
This is very good, IMO, and poignant as it nears the end... thanks. Bar
Hell hath no fury like a woman argued with, so I'm putting my neck on the line here, but I must take issue with you. Trashy, Indeed!!! Oh no they're not, not by a very long way. I've just read through them all, and there are some bits that are absolutely outstanding, in amongst a forest of exeedingly good. The imagery of the bus-stop sign with the bullet hole "just where it hurts most". The last line of D22. The lacy, silky, scanty, showy thingys really struck a chord (that sounds terrible, but you know what I mean!) and Ghost Fog in it's entirety. However, the jewel in the crown is Paper Chase. I've been there, and you've put it all so delicately and poignantly. Wonderful. Keep going, cariad fach!
Dafydd Manton, A Legend In His Own Lunchtime!!www.dafydd-manton.co.uk
My Work Has Been Spread Over Many Fields!
Another strong piece, Haunted.
If we are allowed to choose a
favorite, I adore D22. It is a fine
bit of work...peace...
"Remember, we are all in this alone." - Lilly Tomlin
Bar, I value your opinion, thanks!
dafydd, how can I argue with you! Thanks! And so sorry you too had your own version of paper chase...
hack, thanks for taking the time, your kind comments are greatly appreciated!
"But do you really, seriously, Major Scobie," Dr. Sykes asked, "believe in hell?"
"In flames and torment?""Oh, yes, I do."
"That sort of hell wouldn't worry me," Fellowes said."Perhaps not quite that. They tell us it may be a permanent sense of loss."
"Perhaps you've never lost anything of importance," Scobie said.
You have great imagination Haunted. Your head must be a very weird and wonderful dwelling
keep them coming
JB
Thanks Jerry. Mostly mush inside my head but I can be inspired, especially with a comment as encouraging as this!
"But do you really, seriously, Major Scobie," Dr. Sykes asked, "believe in hell?"
"In flames and torment?""Oh, yes, I do."
"That sort of hell wouldn't worry me," Fellowes said."Perhaps not quite that. They tell us it may be a permanent sense of loss."
"Perhaps you've never lost anything of importance," Scobie said.
forecast
it’s hypnotizing
how the red cloud
morphs ethereally
into a hundred
free flowing silk threads
as the scented water
gently blends with
the blood
by the time it turns
into a sunset pink
the morphine
should kick in
Last edited by Haunted; 08-03-2010 at 05:10 PM.
"But do you really, seriously, Major Scobie," Dr. Sykes asked, "believe in hell?"
"In flames and torment?""Oh, yes, I do."
"That sort of hell wouldn't worry me," Fellowes said."Perhaps not quite that. They tell us it may be a permanent sense of loss."
"Perhaps you've never lost anything of importance," Scobie said.
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