Oh I love Google Earth. The broad concept right down to the precise location of where you wish to be Haunted. How wonderful! I fear I miss your poems on this thread and I am sorry if I do!
Oh I love Google Earth. The broad concept right down to the precise location of where you wish to be Haunted. How wonderful! I fear I miss your poems on this thread and I am sorry if I do!
Before sunlight can shine through a window, the blinds must be raised - American Proverb
Thanks Mary, dreams are yet the best place to be.
Very perceptive, Jerry. I do like to mix things up.
Delta, so glad you discovered it finally, thanks for your lovely comment!
"But do you really, seriously, Major Scobie," Dr. Sykes asked, "believe in hell?"
"In flames and torment?""Oh, yes, I do."
"That sort of hell wouldn't worry me," Fellowes said."Perhaps not quite that. They tell us it may be a permanent sense of loss."
"Perhaps you've never lost anything of importance," Scobie said.
I'm going to try and copy this one day!
Before sunlight can shine through a window, the blinds must be raised - American Proverb
Oh! This just got better and better as we zoomed right in! I could practically see the pair of jeans that you had carelessly let fall to the floor before you got into bed!
LOL Delta, I"ll trade for one of yours
Thanks Prince
"But do you really, seriously, Major Scobie," Dr. Sykes asked, "believe in hell?"
"In flames and torment?""Oh, yes, I do."
"That sort of hell wouldn't worry me," Fellowes said."Perhaps not quite that. They tell us it may be a permanent sense of loss."
"Perhaps you've never lost anything of importance," Scobie said.
Haunted - you know already how much I loved this one of yours. A masterpiece.
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I really enjoyed Car Talk which, though light and jaunty, has bite. Google Earth too is a sound poem but I'm not crazy about the little grave markers between the strophes
Live and be well. H
Hill, I'm so relieved, I was afraid you might change your mind. Thanks again!
Hawk, so glad you liked Car Talk. I left out the catalytic converter...I'll save it for Car Talk the Sequel. Grave markers? I kinda like that, LOL. Thanks so much for your comments
"But do you really, seriously, Major Scobie," Dr. Sykes asked, "believe in hell?"
"In flames and torment?""Oh, yes, I do."
"That sort of hell wouldn't worry me," Fellowes said."Perhaps not quite that. They tell us it may be a permanent sense of loss."
"Perhaps you've never lost anything of importance," Scobie said.
Thanks to JerryBaldly I went back and looked for this, which I had missed before. The seeming spontaneity of it, the sense that every breath in it comes from a living, feeling soul is very, very moving, butOriginally Posted by Haunted
I must say I want to, I do, resist the despondency of that last line. True, I was somewhat prepared for it by
let’s give me your best acting
pretend you love me more than you love her
but it came more harshly than - in my naivete? - I was prepared for. Nevertheless, it all hangs together so well!
"You must be the change you want to see in the world." Gandhi
Prince, by harsh you mean the glorifying of suffering / an effed-up ending? I take it as a compliment.
oh, it also sounds like I got myself an official promoter of this poem, right Jerry?
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"But do you really, seriously, Major Scobie," Dr. Sykes asked, "believe in hell?"
"In flames and torment?""Oh, yes, I do."
"That sort of hell wouldn't worry me," Fellowes said."Perhaps not quite that. They tell us it may be a permanent sense of loss."
"Perhaps you've never lost anything of importance," Scobie said.
oh I adore the story concept of Love Story! you executed this particularly well as I was lulled into the facade of real romance only to find otherwise.
Before sunlight can shine through a window, the blinds must be raised - American Proverb
Thanks Delta for the comment, you made my night!
"But do you really, seriously, Major Scobie," Dr. Sykes asked, "believe in hell?"
"In flames and torment?""Oh, yes, I do."
"That sort of hell wouldn't worry me," Fellowes said."Perhaps not quite that. They tell us it may be a permanent sense of loss."
"Perhaps you've never lost anything of importance," Scobie said.
I didn't feel that you were glorifying suffering but that the ending reflected a harsher or more despondent view of the situation than the poem had prepared me for. We had just that one revelation of what the pretending might be intended to cover up - her lover prefers someone other than her - and splat!Prince, by harsh you mean the glorifying of suffering / an effed-up ending? I take it as a compliment.
oh, it also sounds like I got myself an official promoter of this poem, right Jerry?
Word on the street is that Jerry is not only gaga for this poem but that he's a fan of your others as well.
Love "Google Earth," Haunted. You're very good at a seemingly breezy style, then you end with a kicker, either shocking or sweet.
"The important thing is not to stop questioning. Curiosity has its' own reason for existing." ~ Albert Einstein
"Remember, no matter where you go, there you are." Buckaroo Bonzai "Some people say I done alright for a girl." Melanie Safka
I am so glad your poem was "quoted" cuz I was not here when it was written and Haunted...it is a stunner! Not so much in the ending, as it seems to me romances especially those of that era always had a tragic ending.
The year 1948 was a leap year and it just so happened that on 29 September 1948 Laurence Olivier's Hamlet opened in the United States.
Yes you are Haunted in an extraordinary way!
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Everyone finds himself in the world where he belongs. The essential thing is to have a fixed point from which to check its reality now and then.
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