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    Jerry so glad you are here *clang*

    "But do you really, seriously, Major Scobie," Dr. Sykes asked, "believe in hell?"
    "Oh, yes, I do."
    "In flames and torment?"
    "Perhaps not quite that. They tell us it may be a permanent sense of loss."
    "That sort of hell wouldn't worry me," Fellowes said.
    "Perhaps you've never lost anything of importance," Scobie said.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Haunted View Post
    the man in the red suit


    the mall closes
    and I catch up with Santa
    wish for a small gift
    a little happiness

    he says its elusive
    for people like us
    the boxes always arrive
    torn or crushed

    he says he is Greg
    we dance to silent night
    eggnog on his fake beard
    gets in my hair
    Just found this. It's really good, compact but wide, full of hints and nuances. I want more - but that would spoil it.
    ay up

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    prendrelemick I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for commenting!

    "But do you really, seriously, Major Scobie," Dr. Sykes asked, "believe in hell?"
    "Oh, yes, I do."
    "In flames and torment?"
    "Perhaps not quite that. They tell us it may be a permanent sense of loss."
    "That sort of hell wouldn't worry me," Fellowes said.
    "Perhaps you've never lost anything of importance," Scobie said.

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    Good to see you posting on the NitLet agan, Haunted

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    Hi Auntie long time no see. Enjoyed your new iteration of NitLet. See you around!

    "But do you really, seriously, Major Scobie," Dr. Sykes asked, "believe in hell?"
    "Oh, yes, I do."
    "In flames and torment?"
    "Perhaps not quite that. They tell us it may be a permanent sense of loss."
    "That sort of hell wouldn't worry me," Fellowes said.
    "Perhaps you've never lost anything of importance," Scobie said.

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    remembering Kilauea

    you open up
    like a mountain would
    you want me to let you in
    the way you have
    I’m on the verge
    the earth’s paunch churn
    the lava lake swells
    water closer closer closer
    can’t
    I’m afraid
    Last edited by Haunted; 02-01-2016 at 08:43 PM.

    "But do you really, seriously, Major Scobie," Dr. Sykes asked, "believe in hell?"
    "Oh, yes, I do."
    "In flames and torment?"
    "Perhaps not quite that. They tell us it may be a permanent sense of loss."
    "That sort of hell wouldn't worry me," Fellowes said.
    "Perhaps you've never lost anything of importance," Scobie said.

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    Hi Haunted,

    I seem to have missed this. Must've been posted during my apostasy.

    I can't help thinking that there's a typo in l6. Shouldn't that be "churns?" It doesn't quite make sense the way it is.

    Apart from that, the poem is evocative. It puts you in the moment, that seductive few seconds of fear and wonder, the 'imp of the perverse' that tempts the will to oblivion. But at the same time, there are the polar opposites of fire and water, the lava lake conjurs the image of seething liquid red hot rock, but where does the water come from? It draws nearer. Is the narrator running from the fire, the consuming red heat of the mountain, closer to the sea which threatens to consume her if she jumps? Is the fiery mountain the red devil and the water, the deep blue sea? The narrator is trapped, and robbed of volition.

    Interesting. You have earth, fire and water, all of which smother, suffocate. There is no air...

    The narrator is robbed of the freedom to breathe.

    Nice one, Spooky.

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    Come on home Haunted x

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    This place needs you x

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