Thank you, I will have a new line soon.
Thank you, I will have a new line soon.
Deep into that darkness peering, long I stood there, wondering, fearing, doubting, dreaming dreams no mortal ever dared to dream before. ~ Edgar Allan Poe
Ok here is the next line:
The moon and its broken reflection
From The Bridge by Longfellow
Deadline: Aug. 20th
Last edited by Dark Muse; 08-05-2014 at 11:09 PM.
Deep into that darkness peering, long I stood there, wondering, fearing, doubting, dreaming dreams no mortal ever dared to dream before. ~ Edgar Allan Poe
Moons and Hearts
The mirror reflects my broken life
The moon and its broken reflection
Little jewels scattered in the night
A step in the right direction
Shattering hearts make a terrible sound
Broken moons turn to asteroids and dust
I try to remember that what goes around
Comes around in due season, I trust
The moon and its broken reflection in glass
My heart and my soul torn apart
It is just about as easy to fix the moon I guess
As to restore a badly broken heart
So I'll pray for the moon, that its broken reflection
Is simply that, an illusion at best
And realize that I will never reach perfection
Allow my trouble mind and heart to rest
Pendragon
(c) 7/29/2014
Some of us laugh
Some of us cry
Some of us smoke
Some of us lie
But it's all just the way
that we cope with our lives...
The moon with its broken reflection
Will soon get two lovers’ inspection
On a porch where the trees
Seem enchanted as breeze
Plays a tune that will sweeten connection.
My blog: https://frankhubeny.blog/
the moon and its broken reflection
the moon and its
broken reflection
this countenance born
through introspection -
an effigy cast
of collected dews
reveals a poet
without his muse
8/9/2014
Dedicated to my Mother who passed through the mortal veil today shortly after I posted this poem. My poetry page was already dedicated to her, so it's appropriate she have this poem for herself. She encouraged my writing no matter how silly or far out or, well - you know if you've ever visited my page. So, in many ways she was my muse.
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY
Last edited by tailor STATELY; 08-10-2014 at 01:38 AM. Reason: dedication
tailor
who am I but a stitch in time
what if I were to bare my soul
would you see me origami
7-8-2015
My sincere condolences on the passing of your mother, Tailor. May God comfort you in your hour of sorrow.
Pendragon
Some of us laugh
Some of us cry
Some of us smoke
Some of us lie
But it's all just the way
that we cope with our lives...
My condolences as well.
Your poem and comment speak to your mother's legacy. A lovely tribute. You will always have her in your heart, in your memories...and thus, will ever be your muse. May God surround you at this time with the love of friends and family and fill you with peace.
Last edited by Melanie; 08-10-2014 at 09:37 AM. Reason: singular not plural
Live in the sunshine. Swim in the sea. Drink the wild air ~Ralph Waldo Emerson
My condolences as well.
My blog: https://frankhubeny.blog/
Thank you all for your kind words.
tailor
who am I but a stitch in time
what if I were to bare my soul
would you see me origami
7-8-2015
my condolences tailor I hope you are ok.
it may never try
but when it does it sigh
it is just that
good
it fly
And the winner is?
Some of us laugh
Some of us cry
Some of us smoke
Some of us lie
But it's all just the way
that we cope with our lives...
Lovely poems everyone. Sorry for being so terribly late but things have been hectic over here.
Sorry for not giving as thorough a critique as usual, but I will try and say a little something about each poem.
Pendragon: I enjoyed the way in which you compared the moons broken reelection with a broken heart. Also interesting use of the repetition.
YesNo: Beautiful little poem. I thought it created lovely imagery. I also liked your use of rhyme.
But the winner is
tailor STATELY: An elegant and somewhat haunting poem with powerful impact
Deep into that darkness peering, long I stood there, wondering, fearing, doubting, dreaming dreams no mortal ever dared to dream before. ~ Edgar Allan Poe
Congrats. Tailor!
Some of us laugh
Some of us cry
Some of us smoke
Some of us lie
But it's all just the way
that we cope with our lives...
Thank you Dark Muse and Pendragon and cacian; and the aforementioned. Yes I am fine. Having an eternal perspective keeps me grounded.
.
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Next: "If I should die" http://en.wikisource.org/wiki/If_I_should_die, by Emily Dickinson
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY
Last edited by tailor STATELY; 09-03-2014 at 02:19 PM.
tailor
who am I but a stitch in time
what if I were to bare my soul
would you see me origami
7-8-2015
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