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SomedayBy Erika Molina
Someday not too far away the look of my eyes when I see yours will disappear;
You’ll get plain as everybody else.
I won’t notice your body getting closer to mine,
Niether the sight of you face will light up mine.
Someday, not too far away, my hours won’t be spend thinking over all what you said,
But instead the time will help me forget so many days.
So those words and places won’t make me look away,
(As I try to hold on the pain).
Soon you won’t weight in my head.
Someday, hopefully soon, your name won’t make me hesitate,
And my subconscious will keep you away.
Memories will be memories and not present thoughts.
Days in which you’ll be not in my mind will come.
Someday my heart will understand,
And behind the door there will be no more pain .