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    Are We Men or Mice?

    Are we men or mice?
    Tell me please

    I’m not (or am I?) Odysseus
    My Odyssey’s internal
    My Polyphemus is attached
    To my shut wide
    Third eye

    Are we men or mice?
    I know you tease

    I’m not (or am I?) Achilles
    I am my own Hector
    I am my own heel
    Whose wounds from
    The Great Trojan battle
    Won’t heal

    Are we men or mice?
    I’ll check for fleas…

    I’m not (or am I?) Aeneas
    My home’s intact
    But I’ve lost my Dido
    I’m sad and left wondering
    Where did she go?

    Are we men or mice?
    I’ll not appease

    I’m not (or am I?) Homer or Virgil
    My myths have been mythtaken
    My heroes lead
    And now they’re dead

    Are we men or mice?
    I’ll ask you please;
    May I have my cheese?
    Last edited by MorpheusSandman; 01-27-2010 at 12:12 AM.
    "As far as we can discern, the sole purpose of human existence is to kindle a light of meaning in the darkness of mere being." --Carl Gustav Jung

    "To absent friends, lost loves, old gods, and the season of mists; and may each and every one of us always give the devil his due." --Neil Gaiman; The Sandman Vol. 4: Season of Mists

    "I'm on my way, from misery to happiness today. Uh-huh, uh-huh, uh-huh, uh-huh" --The Proclaimers

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    well, mice cannot fantasize. but they're pretty amazeing. you skillfully handled the allusions. thank you for the humor!

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    Quote Originally Posted by MorpheusSandman View Post
    Are we men or mice?
    Tell me please

    Iím not (or am I?) Odysseus
    My Odysseyís internal
    My Polyphemus is attached
    To my shut wide
    Third eye

    Are we men or mice?
    I know you tease

    Iím not (or am I?) Achilles
    I am my own Hector
    I am my own heel
    Whose wounds from
    The Great Trojan battle
    Wonít heal

    Are we men or mice?
    Iíll check for fleasÖ

    Iím not (or am I?) Aeneas
    My homeís intact
    But Iíve lost my Dido
    Iím sad and left wondering
    Where did she go?

    Are we men or mice?
    Iíll not appease

    Iím not (or am I?) Homer or Virgil
    My myths have been mythtaken
    My heroes lead
    And now theyíre dead

    Are we men or mice?
    Iíll ask you please;
    May I have my cheese?
    Jolly good! Morpheus! a fine mixture of humour and knowledge of the classics! and how reassuring that you only ask for cheese and not for men to eat for your meal, even if only because your Polyphemos eye is shut!
    I enjoyed this poem so very much! thanks!

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    "Life is a tragedy for those who feel, but a comedy to those who think." Horace Walpole

    And it is the occasion for witty poetry for those who do both, more or less simultaneously.

    Bravo!

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    Loved the playfulness with words and rhyme in this, Morpheus.

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    G-r-e-a-t! It's so rare when a poem makes me laugh but you just managed it. Your skill of bending form and rhymes to your whims is steadily improving, I think This poem just reads so effortless, although it's probably more of a clue how much consideration and effort went into getting those lines right.
    Last edited by Kutta; 01-27-2010 at 04:46 PM.

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    Morpheus- 2 of my favorite things- humor and the classics. Nice wit.

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    Squeek, squeek.

    It's enjoyable.
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    hmmm, why am I thinking mousetrap LOL. We are amused!

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    I just have one question-gorgonzola or meunster?
    "The important thing is not to stop questioning. Curiosity has its' own reason for existing." ~ Albert Einstein
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    Thanks to cogs, Bar, Prince, Fire, Kutta, jersea, Virgil, Sophia, and qimi; I must say I'm pleasantly surprised at all the response to a somewhat frivolous "throwaway" piece of mine but, as I realize more and more, what do artists/poets themselves know about what will work and what won't? Might as well throw spaghetti at a wall and see what sticks.

    Quote Originally Posted by PrinceMyshkin View Post
    "Life is a tragedy for those who feel, but a comedy to those who think." Horace Walpole - And it is the occasion for witty poetry for those who do both, more or less simultaneously.
    I just love reading your collection of wise aphorisms, Prince; you always seem to have a perfectly apt one. I often wish I could be lighter and humorous more often; there's something about the mixture of pathos and comedy/lightness that's so hard to pull off. If only I could capture in poetry what Ozu did on film I'd be a happy poet.

    Quote Originally Posted by Kutta View Post
    Your skill of bending form and rhymes to your whims is steadily improving, I think This poem just reads so effortless, although it's probably more of a clue how much consideration and effort went into getting those lines right.
    It's wonderful to hear you say this because as I write in meter/rhymes I always feel like the form is bending me! Though this was one of my more effortless pieces, actually; if I'm getting any better at using forms it's probably just the result of becoming a better sleight-of-hand magician rather than actually mastering them.

    Quote Originally Posted by ~Sophia~ View Post
    hmmm, why am I thinking mousetrap LOL.
    I'm glad someone mentioned this since I had actually planned to make a more obvious mousetrap reference in the end but I thought maybe it was best left unsaid.
    Last edited by MorpheusSandman; 01-28-2010 at 02:36 AM.
    "As far as we can discern, the sole purpose of human existence is to kindle a light of meaning in the darkness of mere being." --Carl Gustav Jung

    "To absent friends, lost loves, old gods, and the season of mists; and may each and every one of us always give the devil his due." --Neil Gaiman; The Sandman Vol. 4: Season of Mists

    "I'm on my way, from misery to happiness today. Uh-huh, uh-huh, uh-huh, uh-huh" --The Proclaimers

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    Captain: set the controls for intertextual overdrive!

    Not much I can add, but yes, very playful. I think I almost banged my head on the keyboard when wincing at this:

    My myths have been mythtaken
    and what do you mean by this??

    My Polyphemus is attached
    To my shut wide
    Third eye
    I've not heard it called that before...

    Nice 'please-tease-fleas' rhyme in the couplets throughout, which gave some semblance of form and... yeah, whatever, be off with yer!

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    Quote Originally Posted by blnk_vrz View Post
    I almost banged my head on the keyboard when wincing at this:
    I gotta admit; I blatantly stole that from a Joss Whedon line in Buffy the Vampire Slayer where someone says "The Slayer... we thought you were a myth" and she replies "Well, you were mythtaken". I just always giggled at that and thought it fit well here.

    Quote Originally Posted by blnk_vrz View Post
    and what do you mean by this?? I've not heard it called that before...
    I couldn't tell you myself. I liked the idea of equating the cyclops with the mystical "third eye" that's "shut wide" (something I borrowed from Kubrick's "Eyes Wide Shot").

    Thanks for the comments.
    "As far as we can discern, the sole purpose of human existence is to kindle a light of meaning in the darkness of mere being." --Carl Gustav Jung

    "To absent friends, lost loves, old gods, and the season of mists; and may each and every one of us always give the devil his due." --Neil Gaiman; The Sandman Vol. 4: Season of Mists

    "I'm on my way, from misery to happiness today. Uh-huh, uh-huh, uh-huh, uh-huh" --The Proclaimers

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    I couldn't tell you myself. I liked the idea of equating the cyclops with the mystical "third eye" that's "shut wide" (something I borrowed from Kubrick's "Eyes Wide Shot").
    Yes, I thought there was a hint of Kubrick in the phrase. However, it must just be my dirty mind, thinking it related to something more physical about a man's body, if you see what I'm saying...

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    Ooh, I had not considered that. Well now I like your interpretation!
    "As far as we can discern, the sole purpose of human existence is to kindle a light of meaning in the darkness of mere being." --Carl Gustav Jung

    "To absent friends, lost loves, old gods, and the season of mists; and may each and every one of us always give the devil his due." --Neil Gaiman; The Sandman Vol. 4: Season of Mists

    "I'm on my way, from misery to happiness today. Uh-huh, uh-huh, uh-huh, uh-huh" --The Proclaimers

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