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    Tale of The White Witch…

    Tale of The White Witch…

    Neath the wicked kiss of moonlight
    In the Kingdom of Nevermore
    The White Witch is waiting
    For her lover by the shore

    One eye forever
    To gaze toward the sea
    One eye forever
    Blind to what may be

    Yet she stays for the hope
    Of the cruel heartaches end
    And she prays that the Sea
    To her power would bend

    But the Sea is a Mistress
    Whose depths are blackened pitch
    Ever holding her dead
    Against magic of The Witch

    So she cries in silence
    And the tears ever flow
    They fall to the Earth
    Seeding flowers that grow

    The petals are black
    And the dew bittersweet
    And their vines grow thick
    And coil at her feet

    So if on the shore
    One day you should find
    Black Flowers embittered
    Amid tangled black vines

    Be ever aware of the
    White Witch who waits
    For any that tarry
    Will share in her fate

    And though Eons have past
    Since she came to the shore
    For her it’s but a moment
    In the Kingdom of Nevermore


    “Thus the grace of age is that we learn to accept.”

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    This reminds me of another poem written about a naughty fairy that leads a inexperienced knight to his death. Poetic fantasy is one of my favorite genres. I also enjoy epic poetry. I'm not very good at critiquing the technical side of poetry, but I enjoyed the story.

    I was slightly confused by this one stanza:

    But the Sea is a Mistress
    Whose depths are blackened pitch
    Ever holding her dead
    Against magic of The Witch

    Who are you talking about, the mistress or the witch?

    Anyway, fun poem.

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    I love the sea and the things it evokes in people. Enjoyed this very much.
    I'm in love with The Vinegar Man and Mr. Tanner, but be careful, it could just as easily be you.

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    enjoyed this very much reminds me of some friends of mine that are pagan

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    What a lovely tale of fantasy, parts of it remind me of Poe and parts of it remind me of Tennyson's Marianna. Some lovely imagery.

    Deep into that darkness peering, long I stood there, wondering, fearing, doubting, dreaming dreams no mortal ever dared to dream before. ~ Edgar Allan Poe

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    I truley enjoyed this poem, however I have a question did her lover abandon the white witch by choice or was he taken from her by the sea ?

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    @ jersea - Thank you jersea, glad you enjoyed it. I also love the epic classic poems in literature. They contain so many wonderful words that have been lost due to being underused in favor of shorter words.
    Now to answer your question;
    "Who are you talking about, the mistress or the witch?"

    "But the Sea is a Mistress
    Whose depths are blackened pitch
    Ever holding her dead
    Against magic of The Witch"

    The Mistress in this case is the Sea (think Poseidon but female in this case)
    (as an entity... a bit of anthropomorphizing there)
    Having to do with the old adage of "the sea never gives up her dead for she is as a jealous lover" etc.
    The Witch longs for her lover (he was lost at sea when she was mortal) and became a witch so that she could gain the power to get him back from the Sea.
    Hope that helps!

    @ ampoule - Thank you amp, then we share a love of the Sea.

    @ nightshifft - Thank you Night, glad you enjoyed it. I wonder if your friends would as well! Feel free to share with anyone you wish.

    @ Dark Muse - Thank you Dark. Poe is a favorite of mine as well as Aesop. It is the creative imagery of wording and the feelings that they invoke that I try to capture the most.

    @ Alexander III - Thank you for the post and to answer your question; The witch was once mortal and in love with a sailor who was lost at sea, her love so great and her heart so broken that she became a witch to battle the Sea for her lovers soul. But you know what they say... The Sea never gives up her dead.


    “Thus the grace of age is that we learn to accept.”

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