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    times dark laughter and haunting

    Times Dark Laughter

    Shhhhhhhhhh listen
    Can you hear just at the edge of your mind? Times dark laughter
    Echoing from the past.
    Can you hear it there just beyond reason just beyond rhyme.
    Like some demented harlequin cavorting in your head.
    Times dark laughter filling you with dread.
    With each tic of the clock
    Every day that slips past.
    With every lie you tell your self
    About getting it right next time.
    Living the lie while your dreams wither and die.
    Putting off today what you can do tomorrow
    And tomorrow never comes.
    Frantic you become searching for that someone
    That makes you feel alive.
    All the while times dark laughter
    Grows louder somehow
    One life to live one love to give
    and you cant seem to get it right somehow.
    When I think of how things should have been
    might have been
    I hear times dark laughter giggling again.
    Living through the hell of relationships that have failed.
    I laugh and I cry and someday I will die
    to the tune of times dark laughter
    Playing in my head.

    dark



    haunting


    memory's as thick as dust
    in a house that isn't a home
    a name whispered upon the wind
    whispered again in your head
    dreams so real I can feel your touch
    hushed foggy nights bright with full moons ghostly light
    haunting me
    calling me
    soft laughter on cold night breeze
    you almost smile but have forgotten how
    movement caught from the corner of the eye
    you turn to look but there's nothing there
    but still you stare
    haunting me
    calling me
    foot steps faint echoing your quickened pace
    you stop to listen
    but the sound you hear
    is the pounding in your own chest
    you gasp as you realize you been holding your breath
    the sound of moaning is simply your own
    haunting me
    calling me
    the scent of perfume
    hangs heavy on the air
    as if only moments ago
    you had been there
    haunting me
    calling me
    music wafting through
    shadowy light
    two figures dancing
    in pale moon light
    a vision of you and I or
    just tears in my eye
    haunting me
    calling me
    to you


    dark

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    In both these poems I admire your command of metre and your line breaks. Spotted an error in "Times dark laughter" where throughout it should be "Time's" and in "Haunting" the line beginning "you gasp" "you been" should be you've been.

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    Good dark poetry nightshift.
    An interesting use of form and play on words.
    Keep writing!


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    Two very grim poems, I especially enjoy how you personified Time in the first poem.

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