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    ~Evolution of a Neighbor~

    Feathers may have been
    the final refuge of the dinosaur.
    An old neighbor in her bamboo blind
    dwells on theories such as this.

    Feeders hung around her pond
    lure finch and sparrow remnants
    of down-sized monsters who perch
    within inches of her frame, bent now
    and shorter since the time she sang
    and whimmed by night with lovers;
    flinched through work by day.

    The birds leave as she stands
    and walks across her lawn;
    stops to curse weeds grown thick
    where tar pits may have plagued
    her slope-browed and wingless kin.
    "People who believe a lot of crap are better off." Charles Bukowski

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    Really like this, Dan.
    What are regrets? Just lessons we haven't learned yet - Beth Orton

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    Dan, I hope you get some of these published. They are so great. Nice scene!

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    You are an excellent poet, DanBierce! Your subjects are viewed from an interesting point of view and always handled with truly original language and images.

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    Not just "whimmed" and "finched," but it is as if every word you use in this is newly coined. It's a SPLENDID poem! Thank you...

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    Original, set in this primeval scenery of unhurried times and places - amazingly rich and beautiful! thank you!

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    I like this, Dan. Very thought provoking!
    Some of us laugh
    Some of us cry
    Some of us smoke
    Some of us lie
    But it's all just the way
    that we cope with our lives...

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    Thanks for all the kind praises on this, guys. I might self-publish a little book of these someday if I ever get them to where I really want them. Seems like never, maybe, but I enjoy working on them, so I'm getting rewarded.
    "People who believe a lot of crap are better off." Charles Bukowski

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