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    ~Sky Aquarium~

    On my back in the grass,
    I look up and watch you sway.

    There is a song in your head,
    and you let a lyric or two
    bubble from your lips
    between smiles.

    The blue/white white/blue backdrop
    beyond your face
    gives the impression
    I am looking at a sky aquarium.

    I want to tap on the glass,
    but then you might swim to hide
    beneath a ceramic bridge
    set in gravel
    by somebody else.
    Last edited by DanBierce; 11-28-2009 at 01:06 PM.
    "People who believe a lot of crap are better off." Charles Bukowski

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    I loved the title of this poem and before I clicked on the thread I saw myself lying on my back, gazing upwards.

    what a wonderful imagination!
    Before sunlight can shine through a window, the blinds must be raised - American Proverb

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    Thanks, Delta. I did an edit in L-2, S-2. Changed "word" to "lyric." I think it sounds better with the other L's in that stanza.
    "People who believe a lot of crap are better off." Charles Bukowski

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    The ending is meant to be sad, is it not? I'm a captive of poems as succinct as this, that tell us all we know in quick, sure brushstrokes and leave it to us to imagine or dream the rest.

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