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    if i was a poet

    if i was a poet
    i would proudly take centre stage
    and if i was a poet
    i would sit for hours and stare at the page
    and contemplate the nature of my verse
    before i let even one solitary word stain
    the purity of the pulpy parchment before me

    and if i was a poet
    i would publish my work formally
    but equally i would speak it
    audibly to audiences of
    revolutionaries and freedom fighters
    later day intellectuals and midnight writers

    and if i was a poet
    i would light fires in their minds
    remind that poetry is about more than rhyme
    that poetry is about reason and
    achieving something deeper than reaction
    and if i was poet
    i would to teach them that acting
    and posturing is lost on those
    who know the feeling that poets capture
    while mere mortals are in rapture
    at the way metaphors encapsulate feeling
    we don't realise that pure genius
    manifests itself in the words
    the world is built on

    and if i was poet
    i would write a folk song
    just to evoke images of longs nights
    spent high on bob dylan's prologue
    to our collective misspent youth
    and if i was a poet
    i would strive to right the truth

    if i was a poet
    i would stay true to my poetic roots
    suitably abuse my walking boots
    and spend the rest of my life bunning zoots

    if i was a poet...
    but as it stands i'm just one man
    lost, wandering the badlands
    with a pen in his hand
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    wow! i love this.

    (*btw, you misspelled the world realize in verse 3)
    Shall these bones live?

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    thank you Bakiryu... and by the way, in England we don't spell realise with a 'z' (:

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    I LOOOOVED this, so honest, so touching.
    I loved the last lines of this stanza

    Quote Originally Posted by Sampson View Post


    and if i was a poet
    i would publish my work formally
    but equally i would speak it
    audibly to audiences of
    revolutionaries and freedom fighters
    later day intellectuals and midnight writers
    And loved the last stanza as well.
    You may be a man with a pen, a proud man with a pen in his hand
    "My reason for preferring the darkness is that in the dark you have to describe yourself.
    In the daylight other people describe you."

    -Old Woody
    Mr. God This is Anna by Fynn

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    English is my second language so I ask this just to confirm my understanding, isn't the title suppose to read ''If I were a poet?''
    Last edited by subterranean; 11-15-2009 at 01:35 PM. Reason: typo, as always-

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    Thanks guys...

    Ans Subterranean, the grammatically correct title would indeed read "if i were a poet". However the title is not grammatically correct, and purposely so in order to reflect my own speech, and that which ha influenced me.

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    I loved it. So honest and raw.

    I have to admit though, reading the title, I thought of the song "If I Had a Million Dollors"

    That aside, a wonderful poem.
    Everyone knows what's in room 101.


    Everything becomes irrelevant, when the sky tears open.

    "Hey Kevin." "What?" "Theres a ditch there." "Sh*t!"

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    I adore this...especially "if i was a poet.../but as it stands i'm just one man/lost, wandering the badlands/with a pen in his hand"
    I love it , I love it, I love it!

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    Cheers guys... Kevin, which song to you mean, because there are a few with that title?

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    Now all I can say is wonderful!
    The only problem is you aren't just a man, you are a poet!
    I sang of leaves, of leaves of gold, and leaves of gold there grew.

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    indeed.... this left me with goosebumps. nice work mate.

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    One man, one poet, is all it takes.
    I'm in love with The Vinegar Man and Mr. Tanner, but be careful, it could just as easily be you.

    "If you're going to write you better have somewhere to come from." Flannery O'Connor

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    One voice crying in the the wilderness of life
    Some of us laugh
    Some of us cry
    Some of us smoke
    Some of us lie
    But it's all just the way
    that we cope with our lives...

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    guys, your praise is disproportionate to the poem i feel... but maybe that was the point to the poem?

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    it is ironic, that's true. i see your desire for expression displayed here. i think the badlands you wander are great inspiration... perhaps the aspiration is to write about greater things, but the mundane is just fine with me.

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