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    ~Perhaps the Odd Angel~

    All I own would not fill a trunk, and my gut
    holds neither god nor demon
    since the boarding-up of my faith's poor shack.
    The demagnetization of the compass my father
    left behind as he sailed away on his warship
    has nixed my direction. All roads are forked;
    lead to air, water, and dirt dead ends.

    I cannot worship the trees or rocks or hills
    since I've witnessed them being wrecked
    and thieved by master hoarders and poets
    who speak of silent seas. The sea is never silent
    except to those who dwell inland from its smash
    and hiss. I'm weary of liars and the love piled
    on their images by household sages.

    If I could find a timer I would set it. Let its
    tick torment those who never want to leave
    this year or the next to someone else. The ding
    would smack of finality and smooth-faced tombstones
    stacked for the engraver's eye and hand. The spark
    behind his spectacles, kept bright by his muse,
    would blind the naive angel who would try to intervene.
    "People who believe a lot of crap are better off." Charles Bukowski

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    Picking out some favourite lines from among this sumptuous feast of words and images is like looking for one particular gem from among a jeweller's hoard, but these:

    Quote Originally Posted by DanBierce View Post
    If I could find a timer I would set it. Let its
    tick torment those who never want to leave
    this year or the next to someone else. The ding
    would smack of finality and smooth-faced tombstones
    stacked for the engraver's eye and hand. The spark
    behind his spectacles, kept bright by his muse,
    would blind the naive angel who would try to intervene.
    stand out even among the whole of this brilliant poem.

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    Wow, Dan. I can't pick out specific lines that spoke to me, because if I did, I'd pick them all. I am mesmerized by your ability to convey such stunning images, in such incredible amounts, with seemingly incredible ease.
    Thanks for sharing
    love
    paper
    "real
    loneliness
    is not
    necessarily
    limited to
    when
    you are
    alone
    "
    -C. Bukowski

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    Dan, this poem evokes some incredibly vivid images for me. There is a sense of frustration to it which really rang true to me...

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    Another winner Dan. If I had to choose, the first stanza is my favorite... and within that stanza, the 3rd line is killer!

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    Thanks again, folks. Glad it works well for you. PaperLeaves: These don't really "come that easy" for me. I work on them and edit many, many times. I'll probably edit this some more as I notice things that I think could be better.

    "The best way to kill a poem is to publish it."
    "People who believe a lot of crap are better off." Charles Bukowski

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