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    Poem Jar

    I want to put your beauty
    in this poem jar
    and keep it on my desk.

    I can use the poem's title
    as a lid,

    but if I put holes
    in the lid
    so your beauty
    can breathe
    it would look like this: oPoeomoJoaoro
    "People who believe a lot of crap are better off." Charles Bukowski

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    brilliant!
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    Love it!
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    "oPoeomoJoaoro"

    LOL ! Whimsical - I like it
    tailor

    who am I but a stitch in time
    what if I were to bare my soul
    would you see me origami

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    funny, yes, but i want to know how beautiful, and how the jar affects the beauty (how does it breathe)... great job with the jar image

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    Haha! Great!
    "As far as we can discern, the sole purpose of human existence is to kindle a light of meaning in the darkness of mere being." --Carl Gustav Jung

    "To absent friends, lost loves, old gods, and the season of mists; and may each and every one of us always give the devil his due." --Neil Gaiman; The Sandman Vol. 4: Season of Mists

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    an amazingly whimsical piece!

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    It started so tenderly then ended as an "O" poem.... very funny! I suddenly heard the song O Sole Mio in my head! Nice one!

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    The beauty of it is, for me, in the way it begins as seemingly the most artless declaration of love, then turns light at the end, that lightness approximating the weight of your heart as you think of her.

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    Glad you all got a kick out of this ditty. Thanks!
    "People who believe a lot of crap are better off." Charles Bukowski

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    Wonderful imagination! Perfect surprise at the end.

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    A light piece from 2009 that deserves a bump

    Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
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    who am I but a stitch in time
    what if I were to bare my soul
    would you see me origami

    7-8-2015

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    I like the part about using the poem's title is a lid.
    "...the ramblings of a narcissistic, self-obsessed, deranged mind."
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