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    Behind Glass

    This one is a little different, but there is something about it that appeals to me.

    Behind Glass

    Dark eyes
    watch through the rain
    black skies

    She lives
    behind windows
    moon glows

    Winds sigh
    fading away
    lost cry

    Deep into that darkness peering, long I stood there, wondering, fearing, doubting, dreaming dreams no mortal ever dared to dream before. ~ Edgar Allan Poe

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    Verses that take me far beyond words.

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    Thank you very much

    Deep into that darkness peering, long I stood there, wondering, fearing, doubting, dreaming dreams no mortal ever dared to dream before. ~ Edgar Allan Poe

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    You're right, it is a bit different in attributes than your other poems, as well as in sublty.

    I particuarly like the vividness portrayed in just a few words. Very simple, very vivid.

    *edit*

    Despite this, upon revisiting, I do find the rhythme to be a bit off. I don't know, the 2-4-2 syllable structure just doesn't appeal to me (in this poem at least).
    Last edited by DanielBenoit; 10-10-2009 at 01:12 AM.
    The Moments of Dominion
    That happen on the Soul
    And leave it with a Discontent
    Too exquisite — to tell —
    -Emily Dickinson
    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TVW8GCnr9-I
    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ckGIvr6WVw4

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    Very nice.

    For some reason I sought to alter the poem extracting the second line from each verse for interpretation:

    "Dark eyes
    black skies"
    ....................sad, dark eyes; dark as night

    "She lives
    moon glows"
    ....................she lives even as the moon glows: a reflection ("Behind Glass")

    "Winds sigh
    lost cry"
    .....................her cries/torments unheard, lost to the winds as sighs; or perhaps her only solace is in the wind sighing


    Which leaves the extract:

    "watch through the rain" "behind windows" "fading away"

    To my mind a tragedy is revealed giving a sense of hopelessness/loneliness of the person in the poem who lives an unfulfilled/unhappy life feeling like she is not living, but merely "fading away".

    Thank you for sharing.

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    Those are some interesting thoughts tailor.

    This poem was meant to have something of a Lady Shalott feeling to it,

    Deep into that darkness peering, long I stood there, wondering, fearing, doubting, dreaming dreams no mortal ever dared to dream before. ~ Edgar Allan Poe

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    Short but extremely well thought out and nicely paced. A keepsake!
    Some of us laugh
    Some of us cry
    Some of us smoke
    Some of us lie
    But it's all just the way
    that we cope with our lives...

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    A tribute to the art of trusting the reader to be present!

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