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    Waves In a Water Cage
    by mazHur

    Like a lion in a cage
    you will remain confined
    to the surface of the Sea;
    Oh, waves! With all your fury
    you'll remain tamed
    in the surge of water;
    I will keep watching you
    like people watch beasts
    imprisoned in cages
    of concrete and steel
    which they can't get out from;
    you too, angry waves, relax
    I am young and beyond your reach
    come with full force if you can
    my legs are strong to outrun you;
    you may be strong but I
    can tame the smaller beastly
    ripples and wade;
    perchance you lost your mind
    and tried to catch me
    I bet you will fail,
    and even if you broke your limits
    you won't get me;
    I am young and strong
    my legs are brisk
    my moves are rapid
    better not foam and flash,
    come on, catch me;
    catch me if you can,
    I am running and can escape
    from your aqua clutches;
    I know you will ultimately
    get exhausted, sloth and slumber
    with the approaching low tide;
    when all your dutch courage
    borrowed from boozy full moon
    would be gone!
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    When asked how World War III would be fought, Einstein replied that he didn't know. But he knew how World War IV would be fought: With sticks and stones.
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    What a brave man you are to challange such a world in itself. But this watery beast is confined in his own world and can't 'outrun' you. And the same can be said to those beasts who are confined in a cage, too, and being watched by people. Adding up, it can also be said that you, one the people, is caged in your own world and is being watched a powerful presence, maybe God, the government, and you are caged. All the things are beyond your reach and, on the other hand, they 'outrun' you.

    This is very nice, man!

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    I am not sure about this and you may have already done it in purpose, but some of the sentences don't have ',' at the end, which will surely make them 'run-on' sentences.
    Last edited by Amylian; 08-15-2009 at 04:00 PM.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Amylian View Post
    What a brave man you are to challange such a world in itself. But this watery beast is confined in his own world and can't 'outrun' you. And the same can be said to those beast who are confined in a cage, too, and being watched by people. Adding up, it can also be said that you, one the people, is caged in your own world and is being watched a powerful presence, maybe God, the government, and you are caged. All the things are beyond your reach and, on the other hand, they 'outrun' you.

    This is very nice, man!

    Note***
    I am not sure about this and you may have already done it in purpose, but some of the sentences don't have ',' at the end, which will surely make them 'run-on' sentences.
    Thanks for your comments, you got the spirit of the poem! Well, done, my friend!
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    Hehe, that was a fun read. Thanks Mazur, I like it.
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    Thanks Virgil.
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    When asked how World War III would be fought, Einstein replied that he didn't know. But he knew how World War IV would be fought: With sticks and stones.
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