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    A collection of scribbles

    I am going to keep adding to this thread some small pieces of poetry as i write them. Just whatever comes to me as i sit by the window or lie in bed. Please comment freely...

    Walking down this gentle granite slope
    slow green verges reclining in the morning heat
    The quiet patter of your rubber soles
    does not disturb the birds
    or the rhythm of the workers, groggily rising for their day shift
    'For sale: baby shoes, never worn'. Hemingway

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    Sprawled neatly in creased shirt above the covers
    thinking of Buddha and green tea
    watching the dust float in thick air
    slowly descending through invisible particles
    Light can make them glow with a ferocity like fireflys
    or embers
    'For sale: baby shoes, never worn'. Hemingway

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    There must be one point in endless monstrous time one point of harmony eternal harmony where everybody at the same moment feels peace
    'For sale: baby shoes, never worn'. Hemingway

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    My beautiful countryside hills grass endless harmony
    condemned to evanescence
    With industry can we wipe out weather, too?
    'For sale: baby shoes, never worn'. Hemingway

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    These remind me of Mark Strand's Sargentville Notebook.

    The first is my favorite because of the textures and sounds you bring together and the wonderful downward movement of "gentle granite slopes."

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    On visiting the imperial war museum:

    Every time i close my eyes i see naked skeletal jewish woman thrown ten foot into her grave
    'For sale: baby shoes, never worn'. Hemingway

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    It breaks my heart
    to leave the dog
    alone in the hall at night
    to sleep and pass the slow hours
    with no depth of thought
    to occupy the lost space in her world
    'For sale: baby shoes, never worn'. Hemingway

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    Inspired by Paperleaves' poem 'pre-meditation'.....

    Nothing, nothing
    sat in this vast open field
    just breathing and focusing and nothing else
    calm waves of existence flow over and thru me with each inhalation
    with each exhalation i push them out
    Last edited by breathtest; 07-13-2009 at 02:35 PM.
    'For sale: baby shoes, never worn'. Hemingway

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    Your last three entries have all moved me, most especially about leaving your dog in the hall...

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    O the alacrity of children playing on the street
    while i sit on this bench in perfect stillness


    I am thinking of expanding this one into a larger poem. I am waiting for the inspiration to continue.....
    'For sale: baby shoes, never worn'. Hemingway

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    These are sweet, I like how you capture the monotonous moments of the everyday. In the quiet moments, we can find such wonderful beauty.

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    Standing at the toilet, i love
    the sound of rain coming
    through the window
    Last edited by breathtest; 07-26-2009 at 09:25 AM.
    'For sale: baby shoes, never worn'. Hemingway

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    I am slowly understanding emptiness
    'For sale: baby shoes, never worn'. Hemingway

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    Irony and a Little Innocence:

    A small child wandering through the graveyard
    observing the grass and the senseless butterfly
    'For sale: baby shoes, never worn'. Hemingway

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    Quote Originally Posted by breathtest View Post
    Irony and a Little Innocence:

    A small child wandering through the graveyard
    observing the grass and the senseless butterfly
    Very nice economy of contrasts, BT.

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