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    A green and civil light

    Listening to the night wind rustling among the trees
    I glimpse you running through the torrid forest
    Covered in the lacy shadows, your white thighs
    Glimmering like white moths fluttering

    I peer intently, futilely, into the dark, down the
    Empty midnight road stretching long into the lonely night
    I stare into the wilderness that runs like encroaching waters
    Into my feet, into my dreams, an illusory green and civil light

    I kneel then, digging feverishly for something
    Something I had lost or maybe it was never mine
    Will it always be wild with an aroma more than taste
    An elusive taste of something unaccountable and rare?

    I see a glimmer, a glimpse of something in the dark, in the earth
    Is that it? Is that it? A glitter of something appears and then eludes
    A shard of light, of something white, pricks, draws blood and tears
    And then is gone, but something drives me on and still I dig
    And I feel again the night wind, a blessing on my fevered skin
    Last edited by qimissung; 06-20-2009 at 11:08 AM. Reason: removed "nymphlike"
    "The important thing is not to stop questioning. Curiosity has its' own reason for existing." ~ Albert Einstein
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    How deftly you build up the suspense and then release it, unexpectedly with this lovely last line:

    Quote Originally Posted by qimissung View Post
    And I feel again the night wind, a blessing on my fevered skin

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    And it all led to nothing acdouglas92's Avatar
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    Wow! Fancy finding one of your poems here....I really enjoyed the imagery in this one! It's really quite amazing how you can so easily paint pictures in my mind. And I think I owe you a poem, no?

    Upon Reflection of Past Events and All Possibilities

    The world is cold now
    Devastated by inequity
    Tarnished by the impending
    of the inevitable.
    Lost is the conception of a future,
    Gone is any reverence
    for a past.

    A man muses by the window, contemplating
    his accursed existence.
    The chill of the night
    curdles his thoughts,
    disrupts his soliloquy.
    No one wants it.
    No one ever wanted it.

    Death awards no one,
    yet eternal joy is to be found after death?
    What folly! the man laments,
    as his plight descends beyond
    despair.

    A bell tolls, unheard.
    Ring, it does, for this World.

    Cold

    Dead

    Done.

    Passivity escapes no one,
    and so tortures this man.
    A cry again, this time
    Bitter.

    Yet still colder grows this world.
    Shakespeare turns in his grave.
    No one is the sun.
    No one is found.
    No.
    More.
    Sun.

    Life lies beyond the starry gates:
    Beyond sanity,
    reason and truth,
    deception and treachery.
    The man dares to reach for it.
    He pauses, considers,
    and resumes his tirade.
    In doing so he chooses his
    oft-cursed despair.

    The Earth is weeping now,
    frozen still.
    No warmth can save her.
    They are finished.
    Ad infinitum is but a whimper
    to the gods of Fate.

    The man sees it, the desolate landscape.
    One thing remains.
    The shadow of the past
    Reaching farther, searching further,
    he finds…

    Solace
    Words unspoken
    Deeds undone
    Inequities unparalleled,
    Equilibriums unbalanced

    He sighs.
    Walks into established
    territory, devoid of sanity.
    Steps further, breathes...

    And is
    Terminated.

    He leaves,
    knowing that he left the world exactly when he wanted to.
    “Be courteous to all, but intimate with few, and let those few be well tried before you give them your confidence. True friendship is a plant of slow growth, and must undergo and withstand the shocks of adversity before it is entitled to the appellation.” - George Washington

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    And time yet for a hundred indecisions,
    And for a hundred visions and revisions." - T.S. Eliot

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    Empty midnight road stretching long into the lonely night

    Great imagery! Can almost feel that loneliness!
    Some of us laugh
    Some of us cry
    Some of us smoke
    Some of us lie
    But it's all just the way
    that we cope with our lives...

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    All are at the crossroads qimissung's Avatar
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    Thank you Prince, ac, Pendragon.
    "The important thing is not to stop questioning. Curiosity has its' own reason for existing." ~ Albert Einstein
    "Remember, no matter where you go, there you are." Buckaroo Bonzai
    "Some people say I done alright for a girl." Melanie Safka

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    All are at the crossroads qimissung's Avatar
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    Hey ac, I like your poem. I like these words "tarnished by the impending of the inevitable." You use the word soliloquy, and actually, this is a good one. I can just hear Hamlet musing on the stage with this poem.
    "The important thing is not to stop questioning. Curiosity has its' own reason for existing." ~ Albert Einstein
    "Remember, no matter where you go, there you are." Buckaroo Bonzai
    "Some people say I done alright for a girl." Melanie Safka

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    I like the description and the mystery of this, Qimissung.

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    And it all led to nothing acdouglas92's Avatar
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    Qimissung, thank you so much! I really do like your poem as well. But thank you, you really do inspire me to write more. Hopefully I'll be seeing more from you soon?
    “Be courteous to all, but intimate with few, and let those few be well tried before you give them your confidence. True friendship is a plant of slow growth, and must undergo and withstand the shocks of adversity before it is entitled to the appellation.” - George Washington

    "Time for you and time for me,
    And time yet for a hundred indecisions,
    And for a hundred visions and revisions." - T.S. Eliot

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    It is a fascinating poem Qimi. I was drawn in and it projects a situation of unresolved complexity. That phrase, "an illusory green and civil light" is outstanding and really is the heart of the poem. The poem is extremely deep. There is only one phrase for me that rings off for me and unfortunately it's the very last one, "a blessing on my fevered skin." Fevered skin seems a little too melodramatic, no? But otherwise an fine poem. I didn't mention the rhythm. I think the pacing of the sentences and line length really makes this move.
    LET THERE BE LIGHT

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    Nice poem ac, I am not sure if I am relating to it correctly, but it reminded me of the struggle some people go through in life and try to find some solace in Heaven, religion, or even God. But the doubt makes it so hard to believe, so we end up insane.

    Anyway, that poem was very good.

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