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    My Girl

    My dear porno girl
    Where are you from
    And how you were born
    What language do you speak
    Why I only hear your moan?

    My sexy naked girl
    Who is your mother
    And how you were raised
    What dream do you have
    Why I only see your bed?

    My pink undy girl
    When dose your boy date you out
    And what he whispers to your mouth
    When will he make you a bride
    Why you never tell him how?

    Oh,My ginger scent girl
    When will you stop
    And how can you be out
    What wish do you cast
    Why I never again see your smile?

    My ten bucks girl
    Where is your sister
    And what do you write to her
    How will you start to speech
    Why I only see lies?

    My dear porno girl
    When is your birthday
    And who gave your the name
    How sweet was your father's kiss
    Why don't you ever think twice?
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    Very good, and a 'hush hush' subject. I like it
    I hope death is joyful, and I hope I'll never return -Frida Khalo

    If I seem insensitive to what you are going through, understand it's the way I am- Mr. Spock

    Personally, I think that the unique and supreme delight lies in the certainty of doing 'evil'–and men and women know from birth that all pleasure lies in evil. - Baudelaire

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    Helga,I am glad you like it. It's a subject I always wanted to write,but I had hard time start to pen it. Hehe,you know,I was about to delete the pome,cuz i got this private message says it's not very quite decent here. I do understand this. But when you read the poem, you would know,it's nothing indecent or erotic about it,right? It might be a bit educational. hehe,who knows, just a simple piece of poetry.

    Thanks for reading it

    ps, can anybody tell how to delete a thread? I didn't find any options to do that
    Last edited by Avalive; 04-16-2005 at 03:13 PM.
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    I like it. well written
    currently in my world of insanity and randomism

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    this is wonderful:
    Quote Originally Posted by Avalive
    My ten bucks girl
    Where is your sister
    And what do you write to her
    it hit me very hard and suddenly

    i don't know that we can delete our own works? and i hope you don't delete this one.
    shh!!!
    the air and water have been here a long time, and they are telling stories.

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    Avalive, I don't think it's impotant to delete it at all. I realize that there are underage kids here but the only thing ' indecent' about it was the title, and you changed it. I think it is important to realize that these 'porno girls' aren't different from us in ways of having a family. Some may be on drugs or something worse.

    And in my opinion it is a big part of what artists do, cross the line and do something that is a taboo.
    I love it!
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    Personally, I think that the unique and supreme delight lies in the certainty of doing 'evil'–and men and women know from birth that all pleasure lies in evil. - Baudelaire

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    I don't particularly see why it would be inappropriate (no offensive language or anything like that) It reminds me of the song 36D by the Beautiful South.
    There once was a scotsman named Drew
    Who put too much wine in his stew
    He felt a bit drunk
    And fell off his bunk
    And landed smack into his shoe
    ~(C) Ms Niamh Anne King

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    I dont think there is anything inappropriate and even the title wasn't...i prefered the old title in fact. I think pretty much everything is allowed in art, if it has a reason of course, and this topic is nothing too scandalous...damn, we can't hide from reality!
    dead on the inside, i've got nothing to prove
    keep me alive and give me something to lose

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    Such strength of soul it takes to bear one this way.
    Do we lose or find ourselves in what we lust for each and every day?
    Does hope relay our bitter fears?
    Does mystery unveil them?
    Of all the porno girl's careers,
    are there any less grim
    than the knowledge that her only love
    might just be another lure,
    the knowledge that what she must prove
    is carnal and so insecure?
    Of all the porno girl's sweet kisses,
    soft, sensual, and full of smut
    where are all life's sacred blisses
    when the beast in heat does rut?
    Porno girls, you pretty dancers
    on beds so wet with sweat and heat,
    you are like a world of cancers
    tied up together in one neat sheet.

    By the way, your poem was very good, and, as you can see, quite inspirational.
    the devil's got the cue ball, the table's bein' run...
    but God bless us all for playin'...
    God bless us every one.

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    Who are we to hide what we all know exists,
    Life is not just white or balck or grey,
    it has many hues,
    how can it help us or glorify us if we choose to hide them
    knowing as we know, deep within ourselves
    that they are there.
    A different topic, a nice poem.
    You cannot build a future from the debris of the past

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