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    Anemones

    Anemones

    Humidity tangles my saltwater hair,
    thick knots of the intolerant me
    lashing out an admonition to a God
    who like the horizon flatlined

    dissecting us from a distant eden.
    Only the whooping vultures fatten
    on the cuttings of His image; the
    fleshy scraps that fall to the floor.

    Their eyes - an oasis. My eyes - mutate
    in the turquoise sea, black coral reefs;
    amputees swaying like anemones.

    Bush-league medicine staining the
    flamboyance, discreetly sweeping
    indigent debris under an all-inclusive
    welcome mat.

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    One of the first poems I ever wrote was about sea anemones. It was in 6th grade. It rhymed anemone with sea and me and be several times. It was less complicated than this Sophia's. It also had a more limited vocabulary and a more upbeat message - namely that marine biology is awesome.
    Told by a fool, signifying nothing.

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    My eyes are swimming as I read this. You have given me so much to look at.
    I'm in love with The Vinegar Man and Mr. Tanner, but be careful, it could just as easily be you.

    "If you're going to write you better have somewhere to come from." Flannery O'Connor

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    Quote Originally Posted by ampoule View Post
    My eyes are swimming as I read this. You have given me so much to look at.
    Hi Amp. My pupils dilated when I moved here too - shocked by the number of amputees. In questioning why, I learned that health care is too expensive for at least 50% of the population and amputation is the cheapest way treat serious wounds, infections etc. Prosthetics are out of the question of course. Things they never tell you in travel brochures.

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    Hi Imthefoolonthehill. Thanks for reading! I don't remember a single poem I wrote in grade school and... marine biology is awesome!

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