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    The Horrendous Fall of The Great Blue Ball

    The Horrendous Fall of The Great Blue Ball
    a brief history of the homo sapiens with a poor excuse for their actions by
    Chris J. Thompson

    Manís sadness transcends any godís notions of its creation,
    Our pleas are lost amidst the ruble and ruin of Eden,
    Our tears of insincerity cannot drip down our face,
    Our screams are hindered by kings who burn our dreams into ashes of hopelessness.

    The kings no longer care nor fret for the hearts of this ailing world,
    They live amongst the greed and gluttony of their fading empires,
    And sit on their thrones of gold and shrapnel,
    We are their profit and their ruin.


    The vivacity of our great blue ball has been kicked out with forces so strong, that it can no longer catch its breath. Its surface is now scared by the vicious nature of its once symbiotic inhabitants. The Homo sapiens who were once the cream of the crop on the great blue ball; in the beginning they were very pure and simple organisms, but they rapidly turned to depraved, immoral slaves of their own ill wickedness.
    The homo sapiens rise to power was somewhat humble. It all started about four billion years ago with the emergence of the blue ball. After many attempts to create life, the homo sapiens were produced. They were to be the most successful creatures and also the most destructive failures the great blue ball would ever see on its surface or skin.
    It remains a mystery what caused the foul to occupy the benevolent, but what is certain is that it caused 75% of pleasant characteristics of homo sapiens to be oppressed for the remaining history of humanity. Those beautiful compassionate genetic traits would lay dormant for thousands of years; they would rarely be exposed to the creature.
    Homo sapiens were very interested in knowledge, they couldnít stand not being able to grasp or comprehend an idea or fact. In the course of finding the truth homo sapiens invented religion. Religion led the same path of humanity, the more wicked homo sapiens became the more corrupt their faith became. Different homo sapiens had different religions, it was a marvelous fact and a dangerous reality. 33.06% of homo sapiens worshiped a deity named Yahweh, 20.28% worshiped a deity named Allah, and 0.23% also worshiped Yahweh, but they had different opinions about him/her/it. The troubling dilemma between these statistics is that these three groups almost always fought. From their birth to the end of their existence, they wouldnít stop bickering and fighting. Their beliefs were beautiful, but their actions were bitter.
    Around the same time that religion came into existence, government was also given birth. Government was an organization that exerted control, but gave security and freedoms. Though many governments never officially endorsed a faith, they all had their biases. The governments that did enforce a religion where of the most cruel and merciless regimes that the blue ball would ever see, they would sometimes punish or kill the creatures that did not agree or practice the regimeís faith. This behavior continued to the end of their existence.
    Many governments fought because they believed that they were more righteous than others, this behavior led to wars. War was a struggle to take land from another government, or attack them because you want to change their ways. The leaders of homo sapien governments would send less fortunate and privileged homo sapiens to fight in these wars, because to them they had less to loose. These creatures who fought in wars were called soldiers. Soldiers were trained to fight and kill other homo sapiens by a branch of government called the military. It was the militaryís job to break every carefully placed beautiful emotion, and replace those emotions with code and duty. Soldiers were sent all over the world to fight and kill, they would set up bases and occupy lands and governments.
    Many wars were even fought over belief and outlook of religion. Many leaders of governments became obsessed with religion so much that they began to hate people of other faiths. Approximately 65% of wars in the history of homo sapiens were caused by conflicts between religions. When wartime arose dangerous objects were created to kill and hurt people on the opposing side. These objects were called weapons, there were many different kinds of weapons and each had a special way to kill and execute an individual. The most powerful governments agreed that it was absolutely necessary that they have stockpiles of the most powerful and brutal weapons possible.
    By the last stretch of homo sapiensís existence they had begun to worship new gods. These new gods were not based on ancient or mythical text but on the love for the bomb. The bomb was the most powerful weapon that that the homo sapiens created, it could flatten entire cities in a blink of an eye, and spread the disease across the land for decades. The worshiping of the bomb became a great tradition of the powerful lands and governments, it was sublime and subversive.
    The bomb was the first deity that was officially known to be created by the now completely self-defiant and self-destructive homo sapiens. There were many different forms of the bomb, just as there were many different types of religions. Many believed that one version of the bomb, was better than others; some believed that all versions of the bomb were good and equal, there was even a few who believed that the entire concept of the bomb was immoral and dissolute, but those individuals were silenced and muffled.
    The homo sapiens did not know what they were worshiping was wrong in any way. They believed that it was necessary to love and devote their lives to the bomb to achieve their path to the afterlife. The afterlife was a place homo sapiens went after they died, it was a place of eternal happiness and love. The homo sapiens knew this because it said so in the prophecy of The Bomb, the prophecy was written after creation of the bomb by the leaders of the most powerful governments. It stated that once the time came the bomb would appear all over the great blue ball, at this time all of the blue ballís inhabitants would take part in one last great war, and at the end of this war the bomb would take the homo sapiens to the afterlife following the destruction of the last remnants of the blue ball. This prophecy would be the end of the history of the homo sapiens and the lands which they resided on.
    The homo sapiens were wicked and immoral creatures, who had forgotten the beauty and elegance which each of them secretly contained. They let their fear and hate overwhelm them to the extent of their abilities. They made excuses and justifications for their sinfulness, but in the end their wickedness had consumed them, they were no longer welcomed on the land, nor did they feel grateful for its recourses.
    Looking at their history from a distance it is evident that they were a very sad people, with little compassion or self-control. Their annihilation was not sudden, but was brought on for a very long time. Their land was slowly flooding and their skies were gradually melting in to a massive toxic bag of litter and filth. They let thousands of their people die of disease and starvation, but they did too little to help those less privileged homo sapiens from suffering a life of mental and physical toxicity.
    They did what they believed was right, because they did not know any better. They lived by a prophecy of fear and greed, and let most harsh and dreadful emotions take control of their childish souls. They seemed to be unable to learn from their mistakes, or take thoughtful advise. Due to a lack of compassion towards their fellow man, they let all of the negative and evil aspects of their land devour and tear their race to shreds. Their fatal flaw poisons natureís authority of evolution, they could not let their progression into more aware compassionate beings get in the way of their own menacing self-interests. They lived by a belief that a flamboyant failure was better than any sort of beginning success.

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    Now I'm depressed !

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    but was it good

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    As a piece of writing it is competently done, you are a very competent writer. In that regard, yes it is good.

    I didn't care for it personally as my taste is more towards a good narrative with
    interesting prose and characters. This was more like an essay full of strident opinion and interpretations. But it made me think, so there you go.

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    Thanks you for the post. I in fact did write the piece in essay format instead of short story with characters. When I first conceived the idea I did actually thought of it as a novel, but spanning characters throughout that much space and time would possibly make it less interesting, so in fear I made it into an essay.
    Last edited by Chris Thompson; 02-22-2009 at 04:44 PM.

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    Please read this; also, please PM me if you have any questions
    about it.

    http://www.online-literature.com/for...830#post657830

    Also, please read a good book about the craft of writing, by William Zinnser and others. I also recommend the Strunk and
    White Elements of Style and The Elements of Expression by
    Arthur Potnik.

    Above all, read a multiple collection of short stories by several authors over several centuries. I've been doing this stuff for
    decades (don't ask how many), and I still have plenty to learn.

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    Please Comment

    If anyone else has read this please comment. You can criticize my work or give advise.

    Thanks
    Last edited by Chris Thompson; 02-27-2009 at 06:19 PM.

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