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    Post One Day at a Time

    You asked for words, I grasped for meanings
    Faltered- submerged- morassed in gleanings
    Caressed not held, at best. Compelled-
    To struggle against surrender
    To the abyss of the pretender
    Who promises peace after submission.
    Simply cease without contrition.

    A song of laughter warms my heart,
    The coldness after, not her, apart..
    This world, myself, aliens. Other
    No words else salient save Mother
    Healing wounds old but ever bleeding
    Whispering to the soul, feeding, leading
    Firming my path to the place of Grace

    Please give feedback!

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    I like its rhythm... and the 's' repetition, it kind of felt as if a snake was talking
    I have a plan: attack!

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    Interesting observation. It was not an intentional effect, but thats poetry for you, right. Thanks so much for your feedback

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