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    Dont open this

    Don't read this poem
    it was not meant to be read.
    A poem with no future,
    a dark past.
    Every word contains poison.
    A toxic symphony in your brain.
    STOP READING!!
    It Bleeds remorse and anguish.
    Suffocates you.
    Drenches your soul in fire.
    Breaks your hollow bones.
    Sears your eyes closed.
    Disintegrates your will.
    Read swift and escape
    with only burns.
    Read swift and escape
    with your life. [CENTER]

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    Great poem...I love it
    Love is an un tamed force. When we try to control it, it desrtoys us. When we try to imprison it, it enslaves us. When we try to understand it, it leaves us feeling lost and confused

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    i like it's energy... i think it could have an object, like its 'dark past' expounded and showing us the danger to ourselves. it's also humorous and foreboding, i was like, 'what, is there a virus when i click on it or something?'. thank you

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    yeah I feel ya, thanks for the feedback

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