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    Darkness Falls: A Gothic Poem in Five Stages

    Darkness Falls: A Gothic Poem in Five Stages

    Stage one:

    In a small and sparse apartment above a Grocery Store,
    He walks the floor and tears his hair and sobs, “Nevermore!”
    He holds in his arms a tear stained letter
    And shrieks “Never shall I forget her!”
    And in despair he hurls himself from the Fourth Floor windowpane.
    And smashes his troubled head against the concrete sewer drain—
    Darkness falls…

    Stage Two

    In a similar small apartment on the other side of town,
    She shakes her head in hopeless sorrow, and wanders up and down.
    Holding in her shaking hands a letter she casts from her on a whim,
    Crying out, “Oh God! Never shall I forget him!”
    She picks up the pistol with hands with hands now so unsteady
    That the gun expels its bullet before she was even ready—
    Darkness falls..

    Stage Three

    In a fine and flashy condo on the richer side of town,
    He’s dressing for the evening with a flourish and a bow.
    He smirks to himself at the idea of two letters sent by post,
    Hoping that he has driven her from the one she loves the most.
    And then his valet has him and note on flowered paper
    That tells him she would rather face the Grim Reaper.
    Darkness falls…

    Stage Four

    They arrive at the hospital at the same moment in time,
    He with bandaged head and her beside of him in line;
    With a bloody gash across her curls where the bullet tore its path.
    They turn like vipers on each other , their voices full of wrath:
    “Letter?” “What letter?” “You mean you didn’t write?”
    Heads buzzing with love they walk off into the night--
    Darkness falls…

    Stage Five

    He’s urged her chauffeur to drive him at top speed
    To the hospital. Perhaps she lives! That is his plead.
    Then, in utter shock he sees them, heads bandaged, arm in arm.
    He jealousy boils over, his eyes glitter with alarm.
    He raises his hat slowly, blows her a gentle kiss,
    Puts his own pistol to his head and his shot does not miss—
    Darkness falls…
    Last edited by Pendragon; 10-10-2008 at 06:49 PM.
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    Love it, Pendragon. I read raptly from beginning to end-loved all the twists and turns it took!
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    Well you know the word Darkness and Gothic caught my eye

    and

    I LOVED it!

    That was just amazing.

    Deep into that darkness peering, long I stood there, wondering, fearing, doubting, dreaming dreams no mortal ever dared to dream before. ~ Edgar Allan Poe

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    This is brilliant, Uncle Pen. The suspense in every "stage" got me hooked. Definitely a favorite.
    Dreams! adorations! illuminations! religions!
    the whole boatload of sensitive !

    — Allen Ginsberg, Howl II.

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    This poem is very heartbreaking, Pen! The portrayal of tragic end of the young hearts with so full of love is really heartbreaking!!! I'm moved by this poem. The rhyme and the ending of each stage seems like a play for me.

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    I loved the Five Stage Gothic Poem, Pen. It grabbed me and held me spellbound till the end. Brilliant.
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    Thanks, all. I wasn't certain about this form's acceptance, the "stages" part, but you have spoken!
    Some of us laugh
    Some of us cry
    Some of us smoke
    Some of us lie
    But it's all just the way
    that we cope with our lives...

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