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    Thank you both for your poems. Enjoyed them both on multiple levels.

    cacian - a fanciful poesy with ideology, an invocation of the fairytale Cinderall (Cinderella)... and lobster!!... loved it.

    YesNo - after research I found oubliette to be a double threat word: open pit or forgotten... a wonderful find. Your use of an abccb rhyme scheme with a syllable count of 86886 resulted in a wistful reading experience.

    A difficult choice.

    Going with my gut on this one - mostly based on an interview I found recently with the B-52's re: their first hit single and choose cacian as having the winning entry.

    Congratulations !

    Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
    tailor STATELY
    Enchant Me

    Your very being a desire for answer
    Lament not your unassailable mystery
    Enchant me with your dreams

    5-14-2005

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    Congrats, cacian!
    "You can always find something better than death."
    Jacob and Wilhelm Grimm, The Bremen Town Musicians

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    tailor STATELy and Danik thank you very much

    and the next subject topic is:

    the sea

    good luck and look forward to reading your entries
    it may never try
    but when it does it sigh
    it is just that
    good
    it fly

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    Thank you, tailor STATELY, and congrats, cacian!

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    Quote Originally Posted by YesNo View Post
    Thank you, tailor STATELY, and congrats, cacian!
    YesNo thank you and long time no seen hope you are well
    it may never try
    but when it does it sigh
    it is just that
    good
    it fly

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    delete
    it may never try
    but when it does it sigh
    it is just that
    good
    it fly

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    Nice to "see" you Yes/No. I was wondering if you had difficulties entering the forum because of the changes of 25.05.
    Last edited by Danik 2016; 06-03-2018 at 10:52 PM.
    "You can always find something better than death."
    Jacob and Wilhelm Grimm, The Bremen Town Musicians

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    Thank you, cacian and Danik! I was having some performance trouble with LitNet, but that has been off and on over the past year.

    Here is a poem for the contest:

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    The Sea

    It’s wet. That’s why I stay away,
    But its enchantment makes me wild
    Like calmly wind drives everyday,
    Like innocence surrounds a child.

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    A Vast Sea of Stars 6.14.2018 / (a true story)


    Death came by while you were asleep
    He paused at your room where another slept
    Yet tarried not there and continued on

    Death came by while you were asleep
    Hindered not by the bustle of caregivers' feet
    His silence a roar drowning out all sound

    Death came by while you were asleep
    Unseen by all till he found his appointed
    Who welcomed him gladly with open arms

    Death came by while you were asleep
    Dozens of pink flamingos stood silent witness
    as a thin man dressed in black
    Transferred a shroud into his van nearby
    where a fountain played

    Death came by while you were asleep
    And later as the golems and shriekers of night
    stood in line for their meds
    A demented man in a wheelchair counted his fingers

    Death came by while you were asleep
    He's piloting a ship through a vast sea of stars
    Ferrying souls to their next destination

    6/14/2018


    Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
    tailor STATELY
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    Enchant Me

    Your very being a desire for answer
    Lament not your unassailable mystery
    Enchant me with your dreams

    5-14-2005

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    YesNo

    a real great piece
    Like calmly wind drives everyday,
    Like innocence surrounds a child.
    the last two lines are brilliant

    tailor STATELY

    an absolute gem of a piece albeit sad. It is beautifully crafted it is to read and reread.
    much enjoyed!

    and the winner is:

    tailor STATELY
    well done!!!
    it may never try
    but when it does it sigh
    it is just that
    good
    it fly

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    That´s a beautiful poem, tS!
    "You can always find something better than death."
    Jacob and Wilhelm Grimm, The Bremen Town Musicians

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    Congratulations, tailor STATELY! Thank you, cacian! I am glad you liked those last two lines.

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    Thank you cacian, Danik 2016, and YesNo.

    This is a true story as I noted in the title - the ending being subjective of course. My wife was at a care facility recuperating from knee re-constructive surgery and I spent 3-nights cat-napping in various chairs nearby. My wife was removed from their care after she developed an infection that wasn't being addressed in a manner conducive to her recovery. For many in care facilities this is their last stop and the last resort for families who can no longer care for their family members.

    The poem was inspired when I took an early morning break to get some fresh air outside and I noticed a black van with its rear door open just beyond the 85 kitschy plastic pink flamingos and a burbling fountain from where I was sitting. Soon, a thin man all dressed in black with a black tie wheeled a gurney with a body covered in a white blanket up to the van door and pushed the gurney completely in... then left. As I pondered this unsettling turn of events I walked back into the facility where meds where being dispensed and I noticed a certain demented man whom I've known for a number of years infamous for his wandering the facility in the past before he was wheelchair bound and entering other patrons rooms and, well, being a nuisance. I had wondered before I saw him if he might have been the "departed", but no - there he was in all his vacuousness.(sigh)

    Ok, new subject on a brighter note (sic): Music

    Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
    tailor STATELY
    Enchant Me

    Your very being a desire for answer
    Lament not your unassailable mystery
    Enchant me with your dreams

    5-14-2005

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    Music

    It’s sound that turns our hearts around.
    Rejecting silence from the ground
    It shares its voice to praise the day
    As we agree and go its way.

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    music
    maestro
    they come to an alliance
    sound is a science without
    the chemical appliance
    each note
    infinite stroke
    light spoke:
    it is the discovery
    of hope in recovery
    Last edited by cacian; 06-25-2018 at 08:45 AM.
    it may never try
    but when it does it sigh
    it is just that
    good
    it fly

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