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    A Addict's Prayer

    Lord, let this cigarette be my last one
    Let this smoke filled moment be the last time
    I already find it hard to breathe sometimes
    Cancer could be in my future if I do not gain control
    Let this match be the last one
    Last time I light up a Marlboro Ultra-Lite
    Forgiveness finds me every time I ask
    But let this tired old prayer be answered
    Even if it be the last one and last time I pray...

    Pendragon
    (C) 6/6/2014
    Some of us laugh
    Some of us cry
    Some of us smoke
    Some of us lie
    But it's all just the way
    that we cope with our lives...

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    Entangled Particles Separate

    1

    The last time that I saw you there
    You had a pizza in your hands
    Then crossed the street to eat somewhere.
    You said your boyfriend understands.
    I doubt he does. Just wait and see.
    When he's with you he'll think of me.

    2

    The last time that I sensed you there
    I carried pizza in my hand.
    I crossed the street to eat somewhere.
    My boyfriend didn't understand
    And nor do you. Just wait and see.
    You never will get over me.
    Last edited by YesNo; 06-07-2014 at 11:39 PM. Reason: grammar

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    The Last Goodbye

    Stale smoke rings hover heavy in the air
    while we lie strewn about the remains
    of our shame, all the broken promises,
    the lies we tell ourselves, each other.

    But we both know this cannot go on,
    it is destined for failure, and we where made
    to destroy each other, beautifully, and agonizingly,
    somewhere inside the need to survive overrides
    the primal satisfaction of two hungry bodies.

    This was our final coda and there is nothing
    left to do but say our goodbyes if we both wish
    to emerge still alive with our sanity minimally intact,

    We both understood when by some fallacy of nature
    our eyes met across miles of impossibility,
    with a feeling like deja vu inevitably
    it would come to this, like strangers passing
    on different trains in the end all we could do
    was watch the other finitely drift away.
    Last edited by Dark Muse; 06-09-2014 at 10:38 PM.

    Deep into that darkness peering, long I stood there, wondering, fearing, doubting, dreaming dreams no mortal ever dared to dream before. ~ Edgar Allan Poe

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    Quote Originally Posted by Melanie View Post
    Okay, next subject is: The Last One...or...The Last Time
    Deadline is June 26
    Just a friendly reminder, only one week left!
    The poems of Pendragon, YesNo, and Dark Muse are all excellent examples of this subject.
    Come one, come all
    Live in the sunshine. Swim in the sea. Drink the wild air ~Ralph Waldo Emerson

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    Childhood sweetheart

    That was the last time,
    When I held your hand,
    Our thumbs caressing,
    Our breathing calmed,
    Without words
    or the need for them
    Contented in the moment,
    In each other.
    Then came the World
    And we parted.
    Last edited by prendrelemick; 06-20-2014 at 03:12 AM.
    ay up

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    the last time
    I saw
    you
    it felt
    like a dream,
    but I knew
    you were
    real,
    and now
    you are here
    time feels
    clear,
    not a cloud in the horizon
    nears,
    the sky
    above you
    revere
    to see
    your presence
    always
    appear,
    everyday to a minute
    dear,
    without you
    life is tear.
    Last edited by cacian; 06-26-2014 at 04:38 AM.
    it may never try
    but when it does it sigh
    it is just that
    good
    it fly

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    Thank you for your patience and I apologize for the delay. I'm impressed with all of these poems as a whole. In fact, that's one reason this took me so long. I liked them all and had a hard time deciding on a winner.

    Pendaragon - I like personal expression in poetry and this one touched me. Life is hard and you express the frustration with clarity in this wonderful poem in the unique form of a prayer. Well executed.

    YesNo - Very clever the way you used nearly identical, yet very different, stanzas. The sting is in the tail…"you never will get over me". Good job.

    Dark Muse - the opening and ending are filled with poetic imagery that really set the mood, "Stale smoke rings hover heavy in the air while we lie strewn about the remains of our shame" caught my interest right way…and…"like strangers passing on different trains in the end all we could do was watch the other finitely drift away." Or did you mean "infinitely"? "Infinitely" conjures up an image that seems to work well with "drifting away", whereas "finite" seems so sudden. No?

    Prendrelemick - this is so tenderly written that I could feel the love between the two of you, so sweet, and then BAM, the "world" packs quite a punch in just one word. Well done.

    Cacian - nice flow of thoughts and words

    …and the winner is Pendragon!

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    Last edited by Melanie; 07-07-2014 at 05:15 AM.
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    Exclamation

    Thank you! As this is July, the subject will be: Weird Family Vacations! End of the month deadline!
    Some of us laugh
    Some of us cry
    Some of us smoke
    Some of us lie
    But it's all just the way
    that we cope with our lives...

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    What's Wierd About My Vacation?

    I wonder why the summer visits earth.
    My parents said I must go on vacation.
    With them? They're flying off to southern Spain
    To see the beaches, "check out Spanish cuties":
    My mother tends to gross me out the most.
    I'm far too young to settle down and marry.
    She wants a grandkid. Well, she should know how
    To get a man confused and make a baby.
    My dad then interrupted our debate
    And I felt even more chained to my fate.

    It's not that I don't like the girls. I do.
    Though some I know are hardly worth the liking.
    There is Janine who treats me well enough
    And then there's Tricia, lovely from behind
    And Phyllis, well, she's almost over sweet
    And Tanya from the front can blow your mind.
    My friends say I'm too picky and they're right.
    Most any girl would do for most of them.
    For me I want a girl who hasn't been
    Enchanted by so many other men.

    We got to Spain. I gave it my best shot.
    "The internet don't work here," I complained.
    My mom said if I didn't get a life
    She'd take away my tablet on the spot.
    And that was how the first week over there
    Was spent debating while I stayed inside.
    I told my mom her bathing suit should show
    A little more since these were Spanish guys.
    My dad said something that I won't repeat,
    But we were civil when we went to eat.

    The second week went slower than the first.
    My parents would explore the tourist sites.
    I sometimes went into the lobby where
    A senorita who was working there
    Said, like my mom, that I should get a life
    Except her English wasn't quite as good.
    She wasn't that bad looking, some might say,
    But now we have to catch the plane and go.
    My parents said that Spain was really great,
    "We left him in his room and partied late."
    Last edited by YesNo; 07-09-2014 at 08:34 AM. Reason: didn't to don't, and then changed it back

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    Festooned Ferrari

    I once rented a ferrari when the winter took off its mascara.
    It rode as a wave, lithe and supple on Sicily's shores,
    Birds came and booed at the ride with their white stuff
    but rain droplets were a panacea to organic droplet woes.
    I once rented a ferrari during the summer Solstice.
    The radiance of my ride attracted the chicks as the
    puddle splash from my tires doused their feathers.
    Oh, you thought I was talking about those chicks?
    Either the radiance of red blinds them during the summer solstice
    or they are Ferrariaphobic.
    I once rented a Ferrari and then crashed it at my girl's place
    The axioms of modern slang have been bent to the point that
    I can intend to mean it was parked in the driveway as opposed to
    sticking out of her front living room.
    I once rented a four door ferrari and had a foursome with my family.
    Four separate beds four separate Hotels at a resort you sickos!!
    Gosh!
    I once rented a ferrari and realized it was the figment of my fingers
    with the real red thing popping up in the literature network forum ad sidebar.
    I will one day rent a ferrari and realize that driving it is nowhere near as
    fun as writing about renting it.
    My hide hides the heart inside

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    Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
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    who am I but a stitch in time
    what if I were to bare my soul
    would you see me origami

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    Vacating

    I had to go somewhere so it might as well be here,
    Scooping out the memories of another crazy year,
    All laid out upon the bed, all the categories,
    Touching my emotions, remembering the stories.
    Something fluttered to the floor I did not recognize,
    I picked it up, smiled at first, then I realized,
    It was that picture of your back as you went out the door,
    Leaving me so all alone just like I was before.



    ampoule, September Twenty Ninth, TwoThousandFourteen
    I'm in love with The Vinegar Man and Mr. Tanner, but be careful, it could just as easily be you.

    "If you're going to write you better have somewhere to come from." Flannery O'Connor

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    And the winner is: (drumroll, please!) http://s1326.photobucket.com/user/Mo...ac53c.gif.html Adolescent09! That first line grabs you and the poem doesn't let go until the end! Congrats!
    Last edited by Pendragon; 09-30-2014 at 07:18 AM.
    Some of us laugh
    Some of us cry
    Some of us smoke
    Some of us lie
    But it's all just the way
    that we cope with our lives...

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    Will Adolescent09 be making a choice soon?
    I'm in love with The Vinegar Man and Mr. Tanner, but be careful, it could just as easily be you.

    "If you're going to write you better have somewhere to come from." Flannery O'Connor

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    You guys are making me feel 'bad'......like I'm killing the threads.
    I'm in love with The Vinegar Man and Mr. Tanner, but be careful, it could just as easily be you.

    "If you're going to write you better have somewhere to come from." Flannery O'Connor

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