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    Disorientation - revisited

    DISORIENTATION

    If your heart is a treasure map,
    then I have been sent off course
    lost in my confused navigation,
    and blown into a heavy storm.
    I try to decipher your clues,
    and gaze into your compass eye
    deep and sharp like an old star,
    pointing me in the right direction.
    My guide, my reflected hope,
    I know this world is surely round,
    and that the curvature of your flowerly limbs
    will eventually lead me home.

    At dawn, I saw birds drop from the sky;
    they came as thick as falling bricks
    out of the crumbling clouds of grey.
    Tonight time's sea is wolf-hungry,
    swallowing my rations of sanity
    as I am tossed to and fro
    in your breaking lifeboat.
    The water rushes on rapidly,
    And I am left to face the edge.
    How long till the last wave comes?
    I do not know, now all is in vain
    and I am drowning, drowning in you.

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    I like this, I can def. relate. Good indirect description.

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    i really like how you extended a metaphor into an entire poem. it is a very good metaphor too, and well written.
    life becomes too complicated, then it falls apart; to put it back together, you have to break your heart.

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