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    Lyrics (upon request)...

    **After my last post, I had one or two cats request more lyrics of mine before posting more poetry. Most are quite short, so I thought i'd post a few of them in the same string. BTW, most songs of mine have no name, so I just posted them seperated by lines. enjoy, and as always, please comment. Peace- Chris


    ----------------------------
    Ten miles into hell again.
    The roots run deep,
    and I'm afraid they want my head, but
    no I aint got one to lose...
    No need to eat,
    I have a bed.
    no need for sleep,
    I think I'll stay awake instead, I...
    I am crawling again, I am afraid I am...
    -----------------------------

    There was a place when I was young,
    upon a hill behind our town.
    We all were kings back then.
    Were we not facing the end
    as much as we are now?
    so where are we now?
    ------------------------------

    Oh, how the wind did blow that night.
    Those red and blues flashed 'cross the evening sky.
    Upon a stretcher, carried away, I
    never did ask where they may go...
    On down the road a ways, a la-di-da...
    Last night still falling from my pores.
    I reached that point, I did not care no more.
    Lock me away behind those heavy doors.
    They did not ask from where I came.
    On down the road a ways, a la-di-da...
    I'm from such a darker place, a la-di-da...

    ---------------------------------
    We were resting,
    somewhere along the horizon
    whispering "in nothing ever believe"...
    and while you were sleepeing
    I layed back,
    questioned my destiny,
    let it all subside...
    How could it get better than this?
    The dope's on the counter, babe.
    I would love you to love to
    get high here with me.
    I think we are dying.
    Isn 't it glamorous?
    Oh, how could time have ever conceived?
    you were my sweet junkie queen.
    -----------------------------------
    Oh, the cold reach of time-
    how it tumbles along.
    I always was two steps behind,
    yet here I am...
    And oh, the cold reach of time-
    as humanity stumbles along.
    Where do you get your peace of mind?
    here we are...
    and the woods, they were dark
    but I sat down upon the ground
    in cold sweats...
    The cold reach of time.
    And how the trees
    apear to dance among the breeze
    as we do our dance.
    The cold reach of time.

    **these are just a few. I have dozens of songs. I posted these upon request, but now perhaps you can see why I don't ever post these as "poetry". they are all pretty short, and not in my "style" of writing, persay. anyways, anyone who reads this, let me know what you did and diddn't like, as always. I don't mind criticism (as long as it's constructive). Also, if you would like tabs to any of these, just send me a PM. for now, though, peace- Chris
    ...Ride life into perfect laughter. It's the only good fight left. -Charles Bukowski

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    i`m not so sure about the first two, but the last three where amazing.
    the first two have good points, and are worded well, it`s just something about them i don`t really like, the last three really drew me in.

    "And how the trees
    apear to dance among the breeze
    as we do our dance.
    The cold reach of time."

    that line was beautiful.
    i enjoy your lyrics, it`s different from your usual style, but it`s still amazing.

    what i used to be will pass away and then you`ll see that all i want to know is happiness for you and me...

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    The brevity, in most cases, was part of the virtue of these, somehow adding to the sincerity of the emotions expressed. I especially liked:

    Quote Originally Posted by sparr0w View Post
    Oh, how the wind did blow that night.
    Those red and blues flashed 'cross the evening sky.
    Upon a stretcher, carried away, I
    never did ask where they may go...
    On down the road a ways, a la-di-da...
    Last night still falling from my pores.
    I reached that point, I did not care no more.
    Lock me away behind those heavy doors.
    They did not ask from where I came.
    On down the road a ways, a la-di-da...
    I'm from such a darker place, a la-di-da...
    Most particularly the line I bolded, and

    Oh, the cold reach of time-
    how it tumbles along.
    I always was two steps behind,
    yet here I am...
    And oh, the cold reach of time-
    as humanity stumbles along.
    Where do you get your peace of mind?
    here we are...
    and the woods, they were dark
    but I sat down upon the ground
    in cold sweats...
    The cold reach of time.
    And how the trees
    apear to dance among the breeze
    as we do our dance.
    The cold reach of time.

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    Smile

    Well since you don't mind criticism
    So long as it is construtive
    You've got a good thing going on here
    Keep it up, let it flow
    On down the road a ways, a la-di-da...
    Even if you are two steps behind
    Gonna catch back up, right?
    Didn't you say "I questioned my destiny,,
    Where do you get your peace of mind?"
    Hitch your wagon to a bright star
    Time to show the whole world just who you really are
    Undefined by tiny white grains


    There you go. Some new lyrics using lyrics I liked of yours! You'll figure out the tune!

    Pen
    Some of us laugh
    Some of us cry
    Some of us smoke
    Some of us lie
    But it's all just the way
    that we cope with our lives...

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    Wow, thanks to all for your feedback. Lucid, Prince, and Pen, I feel over the last couple of months that I have made some special connection to all three of you. I was surprised to get positive feedback on any of these. As I said, they are not in my usual style. I have destinctly different styles of writing between my poetry and my music. I personally love them each equally, but never saw the possability of ever publishing lyrics. I, as you may have caught earlier, don't use the typical "verse/chorus/verse" form often, moreso a block of music, followed by a block of uninterrupted lyrics, followed by another block of music, therefore the lyrics are often short and to the point, as opposed to my poetry which is longer, and much higher in the descriptives. In my poetry, I try to portray a quick moment, whereas in my lyrics I try to get across a belief or a general idea. Very different, yet each close to my heart. I only wish I had a way to get out there the music behind these lyrics. I have probably over 40 songs, posting these was kind of an experiment (because someone requested I post more lyrics after "Old Soul"). Thanks again for your comments, and Pen, I like the ideas. Not quite the way I would have written them, but quite enjoyable nonetheless. Peace! -Chris
    ...Ride life into perfect laughter. It's the only good fight left. -Charles Bukowski

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