Remember i told u to finish it because i liked the beginning? Guess what? I still like it.
Thanks for finishing it. And
But there's a few points i may have overlooked before. Some things just hit me now as i was reading it more carefully. Firstly, that 2nd line's confusing me a lot today. I cant quite connect it to the 3rd line and rest. When ur saying "it was
not beyond reproach", how can u say that the "architecture" is
frolic and u're indebted to God for that(assuming the "him" meant "God", since the 1st line said "trumpets of
God")? And also i cant interpret the use of the word "frolic" in this poem. The poem seemed(to me) to work on giving a divine image of death rather than frolic...
And i found it a bit tough to visualise this poem too, because, just when i've started to feel/visualise the poem, the words "frolic architecture" stopped me and took me nowhere, not even to the void it speaks of. It kinda wound me up with a question like "what architecture, sorry?"!
It can be that i'm a horrible second reader. But as u can see, u have to bear with me.